People in communities can make decisions that protect and improve the natural environment. Which one of the following three actions is most useful for people to do if they want to help the environment in their local community? Explain why.
1. Plant trees and create parks
2. Persuade local shops to stop providing plastic bags to customers
3. Increase access to public transportation (for example, buses or trains) to reduce the number of automobiles on local roads.
Throughout the past decades, there have been a controversial debate amid people to save the ecosystem efficiency. Some people are of the opinion that they should put effort in creating parks and planting trees, while other believe that pollution, especially plastic bags, are more harmful for the environment , so their usage should be diminished. There is third group of people believing that increasing public transportation and decreasing individual car usage are more beneficial for environment. I do concur with the third group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate my reasons in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, individual cars are the most significant contributor in enhancing green-house gasses, increasing the average temperature in the earth. To be more specific, individual cars and automobiles burn a considerable amount of fuel for transporting a few number of people that produce various number of green-house gasses, like CO2, O3. Produced gasses saturating the earth's atmosphere reflect the absorbed heat by earth, emmited during the nights, and encrease the average temperate. By enhansing the temperate the climate changes significantly and seasonal perid change, the summer be warmer and winter be colder. Changing the climate also provide some hefty brain and snow in some vulnerable areas that may couse irreversible results. In this regard, by increasing the access to public transportayion the efficiency of the transport system will be augmented since would move more people by less fuel expended. Hence, the more public transportation increase, the less green-house gasses produced, which result in having safer environment.
Secondly, increasing public transportation provide constant income for ecofriendly activities, helping allocate money to specific project that does not have enough budget. To clarify this notion, the governmets have to allocate a considerable amount of budget to repair cities that are harmed due to heavy traffics such as repairing the streets or allocating special budget for providing adequate fuel for citizens, usually the fuels need to governmental finance help since the final price of the fuels are so much. In contrast, by increasing the public transportation not only the government can earn money due to selling tickets but also it can eliminate the yearly budget that allocated to the result of the heavy teraffics since the busses and subways will transport a cosiderable amount of people in a short time and will not produce heavy traffic. Last year, for instance, 5 million dollars were allocated to help people buy their needed fuel and 10 million dollars were allocated to repair the subways and streets in Iran. Had the government does allocated that amount of money to public transportation, it would be able to eliminate the extra costs and use them to devote them to eco-friendly activitists such as producing ecofriendly products or planting trees.
To sum up, I strongly believe that increasing the public transport system, such as bus and subway, plays a profound impact in helping environment. Not only does it decrease the emmited green-house gasses, but it also by increasing financial incomes help to save the environment
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Suggestion: ,
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'earths'' or 'earth's'?
Suggestion: earths'; earth's
...CO2, O3. Produced gasses saturating the earths atmosphere reflect the absorbed heat by...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, while, for instance, in contrast, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2724.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4371257485 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96873439609 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510978043912 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 846.0 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.2542852827 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.333333333 100.406767564 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8333333333 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137607100576 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044921763206 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0340185047718 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0893750269028 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457258473495 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 11.7677419355 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 86.8835125448 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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