Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The telephone have a greater influence on people's lives than television has.
By the galloping development of technology, different technologic tools are innovated to influence on people. Although old generation think telephone have a profound impact on human life, i strongly believe that, television by the help of the its product has a considerable effect on our lives. I will elaborate on my reasons in the subsequent essay.
Initially, television has a vast variety of serials and program which attract a large amount of viewers. Serials not only help to spread social manners in the society, but they also by the help of the psychologist, try to teach their people psychological aspects. Government when realized people's interest about broad casts, investigated a large amount of money to can deviate social attitudes due to their purposes. For example, turkish government for expanding tourism industry, invest a large amount of money on film making. They used famous people in their movies who travel all around the turkey and communicate by village people and describe each city's beauty and products. After 10 years, not only most of the turkish were travelled to all the turky's cities, but they also absorb a huge number of tourisms from all around the world. Also, by the use of educational program, you can change your people's life style. For instance, if you want to decrease the fast-food's usage on diets, you can investigate on some cooking program which teach parents to cook home made foods. In this regard, by the vast variety of television program, we can conclude that it has a great impact on our lives.
Moreover, one of the serious tools for effecting on people is news which spread by the broadcast or oral. Altough spreading news by oral such as telephone has a old history, the most accurate news emitted by television or radios which are strong tools for governments to prohibit fake news and announc true news. For example, corona virus had spreaded about 2 years ago in IRAN, all the people were firightened and couldnt concentrate what theyshould do to prevent virus's spread. In this regard, government by providing true news about the corona's parent and and prohibiting ways tried to decrease people's worry and increase their confidence. Statistics show that, if government's news were not spreaded, they would have not been able to halt its widespread.
To sum up, by the television's product, such as news, serials, and educational products which their influence are experienced, not only we can stop bad effects the phenomenas, but we also can affect directly on their life style to can have a better society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2152.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03981264637 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71046098125 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545667447307 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3235068184 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.555555556 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7222222222 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131127100061 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0417094131283 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0252280164418 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.080383323423 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0121573166314 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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