Imagine that you are going to visit a new city, which one
of the following ways do you think is the best way to know
the city in a short time?
1. Visit historic sites
2. Go to shops and markets
3. Enjoy the restaurant and spend time in café
Throughout history, people have visited various countries and cities to acquire knowledge about specific features of the city. In this regard, various options have proposed to visit when people go to a strange city. Some people suggest tourists to visit shops and markets, while other people think the historical sites are better to gain knowledge. There is a third group of people believing that the best place to obtain data is restaurants and cafes. I concur with the first group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate them in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, culture is one of the critical aspects that people should consider when visit a city. Shops and markets are a spectacular suggestion to acquire information about the culture since local people in markets will not pay attention into tourists, and they will do their daily activities like buying, selling, communicating, and other daily jobs. Moreover, the local people in shops and markets will wear their local clothes, so tourist will see a tremendous number of them in markets, while in touristic sites the tour-leaders try to wear the modern clothes and communicate by international languages. Also, tourist in shops will understand locals’ attitudes due to strange people while they do not understand their languages. Last year, for instance, some of my friend came to Iran to visit my city Tehran. At first, I was their leather, and I show them some places like palaces and parks. Then, I had a problem, and I did not go with them; my friend described me that they had gone a small local market in Tehran's village, and they were fascinated since they had communicated with local people and had gotten much information from their culture, while there were not many people in the village, but the market was plentiful. Had not they visited the local markets, they have not been familiar by Tehran's local villages' culture.
Secondly, shops and markets are created due to the cities demands like the population, interest and history. To be more specific, the shops are one of the most crowded places in cities and administrators try to form it to supply cities’ needs. The more cities’ population grow, the more markets’ size and number increase. Moreover, for constructing a market the governments should to consider the geological concepts. To be more specific, the cities are located in the middle of Iran are isolated and just have some input and output doors since the temperature is high and they for saving the energy have to isolate the markets. Furthermore, the markets are constructed based on historical events, like Tehran's great market that was located outside of the city to save more lives in the war periods since the city's capacity was limited.
To sum up, I do believe that the best place for getting information from a city when we are tourists is markets. Not only they help us to gain cultural information from ordinal people that do not pretend strange attitudes, but they also show many data about historical and geological concepts.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, while, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2546.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00196463654 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63069308055 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445972495088 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 792.9 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.3521294873 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.238095238 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2380952381 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181684653295 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649900435115 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362389728883 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11886901087 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356924967564 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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