Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Two people can still become good friends if one of them has more money than the other one does.
Throughout history, countless friendships have been established among people, and various contributors have been called affecting the relationships. Although some people believe that finantial differences between friends will hurt the friendship, I believe that money will strength the relationship and also other factors play more important role in friendship. I have two significant reasons to support my idea, on which I will elaborate them in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, friendship have been established based on mutual interest and trust. First relationships in human's life have been made in the childhood while the young generation have not any consideration about finantial aspects, and the relations created based on mutual games, schools or hobbies. People when grow up, participate in differente condition and created groups and bands due to their common features like same job purpose or same interest. Hving same purposes and interests make people spend more time with each other and collaborate in same path. The more time people spend with each other, the more familiarity and trust are discovered among them. By enhancing trust and profound relationship, the friendship establish. It is too important to assert that the money have a fad effect in peoples life since after awhile that they pass their hard conditions, they will not find any mutual interest or trust and will break their relationship.
Secondly, although money do not play an important role a friendship at the first step, it will influence in profounding the relationship. To be more specific, people in hard conditions attempt to find help from their friends and family. By the great expansion of the finantial problems, people try to hide themselves from each other to do not be requested for money. If a friend in such a hard circumstances try to borrow a considerable amount of money, it will show that the friendship is more important than money aspects and has chosen the relation to that. Last year, for instance, I had a great loan debt and no one borrow me the money. I had a friend in a city that we had a superficial relationship and I had not seen him for a while. When he heard about my money issue that no one gave me the money, he gave me a considerable amount of that. After a while, when I pass the problem, I made a profound relationship with him since he had helped me in hard conditions. Had I had not such a wealthy people, I have not passed my problems and established such a profound frienship.
To sum up, I believe that friendship can be durable with fanantial difference. Not only does friendship affects by more important roles in friendship like mutual interest and trust, but it also will help to provide better friendship in hard conditions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2311.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00216450216 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91162552565 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465367965368 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0501550491 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.047619048 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95238095238 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183699774419 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604354946278 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519529898147 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105299384832 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346257039737 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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