Some lessons for young students increase their interest to learn including video games. But some people believe it will distract young students. What is your opinion? Why?
By the galloping rate of technology development, a vast variety of teaching method has occurred, which helps the teachers to teach lessons better like game consuls. Some people fascinate these new products, but others deny them and claim that they would distract student's focus also, hurt their study program. In my opinion, although most of the video games would waste students’ time, and distract their consequence on lessons, educational games would stimulate their interests and cause to learn better. I would elaborate on my reasons in the subsequent essay.
Initially, wasting time is the most important issue of parents, which extremely occurs in video games. Students spend a large amount of time playing video games, which usually hurt their health, and they cannot pay attention to their lessons. By changing the model of studying from books to video games, not only would we decrease their inefficient playtime, but we also increase their study time which is prevalent in their game time. So by educational video games, we can enhance their study period.
Secondly, psychology theories assert that if you want to learn better, you should combine your study with activities which stimulate your interests, such as listening to music or eating fruit. In this regard, using a video game which is a momentous factor in stimulating children’s interest, can be a good tool to effects them considerably. Most of the educational games designed to use educational aspects to pass the levels, so if students do not concentrate on lessons, they would not be able to pass the game's levels. For example, my brother for his chemistry class had to pass a chemistry game last year, he not only searched the chemistry formulas and equilibrium on the Internet, but he also explored them on different sourcebooks to find his answer.
Finally, video games besides its profound influence on encouraging students to learn lessons better, help them to be familiar with their interests and job positions. For example, by chemistry games, they would be familiar with laboratory careers, and physical games would lead them to mechanic jobs, which required their knowledge based on games.
To sum up, although video games might have some bad influence on student's interest and timing, but they by enhancing student's study time, conducting them on finding job field, and an impact profound on their learning result, can be a good tool for providing a good infrastructure to reach success and prosperous in studying.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, if, second, secondly, so, for example, such as, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2117.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21428571429 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68421041675 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524630541872 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.4200809418 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.133333333 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0666666667 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73333333333 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274681497762 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0989585102331 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706703777917 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170107460363 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470708471337 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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