Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout the television history, there have been a controversial debate about the broadcast's influence on young generations. Although some believe that the television badly effects on young people, wasting their time and producing inappropriate programs, I think televised programs have a profound positive impact on young individuals for two significant reasons, on which I will elaborate them in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, the television produce numerous educational programs that provide equal chance for all the students. To be more specific, providing equal opportunities for all the students around the world is one of the fundamental goals of the educational systems. There is no doubt that usually wealthy people use the best private tutors in the country to educate their children and prepare them for school's exam, while the poor children just can focus on their public education system. Unequality in education system plays a critical role in people's social situation in the future since the rich people will acquire the the best job oppurtunity with fat salaries while poor people will be conducted to lower salary jobs. In this regard, the televised broadcast play a significant positive role in educating young generation as will provide a free availabe courses for all people both reach and poor. Thus, the more public broadcasts increase, the more educational opportunities will increase for young generation.
Secondly, movies and televised programs help to broad people's ,especially younger ones, knowledge about political events. To be more precise, young generation do not have enough data about political events, and since they have a considerable passion for increasing their social activities try to participate in different political campaign to achieve knowledge. Thus, they would be attracted to some specific viewpoints while do not know that they are true or not. Moreever, since the political advertisements in the campaigns are so powerful they would not understand different views and will be attracted to a special viewpoint and will not judge other views benefiting more to the country. In such circumstances, televised program affects adversely by producing political debates that argues about different point of views and help younger ones to not be attracted to a particular viewpoint without any consulting or concluding. Had televised programs had not been provided before important political events such as the americans election five years ago, the presidident have not been elected by the younger generation since does not have a powerful campaing among peoples.
To sum up, I believe that television has a profoung positive impact on younger's life. Not only does ir provides equal educational opportunities, but it also helps younger ones to be familiar with different political viewpoints by televised arguments.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, i think, no doubt, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2437.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53863636364 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93797362983 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522727272727 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 772.2 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.3694215987 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.3125 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4375 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16418279308 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606768473932 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330058919795 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105729177576 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338434391171 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 58.1214874552 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 10.002688172 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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