Do you agree that people should always participate in the activities that they are good at or talented?
By dawn of the civilization, people have started to participate in different activities which are related on onrelated to their talent and interest. Although most people believe that we should participate in activities which are unfamiliar to our abilities and interests, I strongly believe that we should attend in courses and acts that are similar to our talents to expand our communitation and learn better. I will alaborate on my reasons in the subsequent essay.
Initially, background has a profound impact on human's learning process which helps us to learn better and deeper. Participating in activities which we are so tallented on them not only help us to better comprehend works and concepts, but they also help us to boost our self confidence in activities which we are not good enough. For example, I finished my military period about 3 years ago and I had lost my confidence completely. After a while, a famous company suggested me a good job opportunity which was familiar to my talent. I worked about 2 years and learned all the work's detail imidiately and this success helped me to attain confidence for continueng my academic courses and be a prosperous engineer in my country. In this regard, i think if you want to stimulate yourself to your purpose, its time to experiment yourself in your talented activities.
Secondly, one of the momentous factors for successing in life is related to your community, especially in your job field. Its vivid that if you want to make a powerful community, you should show your talent and ability to convey other and make community with you. In my opinion the best way to make a great community chain is to participate in activities which is based on your ability and interest. For instance, last year I attend in a mechanical exhibitation which was held in Istanbul, i whatched different companies and engineers from different countries. I described my tallent and interest to them and fascinitate them to my ability, and this participating provide me a large number of job opportunity that made me so famous and prosperous. So participating in your field and interest activity can help you to find better job and expand your professional relation.
To sum up, attending in activities which are based on your abilities are a good way to stimulate your self and boost your confidence also, it would help you to enlarge your friend and work society to recieve a vast variety of work opportunities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 404, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...s to expand our communitation and learn better. I will alaborate on my reasons in the ...
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Line 4, column 96, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...earning process which helps us to learn better and deeper. Participating in activities...
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Line 4, column 743, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...engineer in my country. In this regard, i think if you want to stimulate yourself...
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Line 6, column 676, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...lity, and this participating provide me a large number of job opportunity that made me so famous ...
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Line 6, column 806, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help you find' instead.
Suggestion: help you find
...in your field and interest activity can help you to find better job and expand your professional...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95410628019 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96342162399 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485507246377 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.6347237687 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.1875 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.875 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197976976175 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691201599353 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659798713068 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131486775956 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511347909611 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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