The government wants to fund the following to improve children’s education:
1. Hire more teachers to teach in a small class.
2. Provide preschool education before kindergarten
3. To provide some training courses so that teachers can be more professional.
In today's modern century, education, which starts from kindergarten and continues to college, plays a considerable role in the nation's future. Education in schools conducts students to their future job and social activities. In this regard, governments try to allocate their budget to education to improve the country's improvement. Although some people believe governments should spend money on hiring new teachers, or developing teachers' skills, I think the money should be devoted to preschool education on which I will elaborate my reasons in the subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, students before entering the schools need to learn some skills, such as note-taking and study methods to cope with studying difficulties. To clarify this notion, students by entering the school face a large number of lessons, and if they had not prepared by learning skills, they would get stress and anxiety. Also, teachers in schools have not enough time to teach both courses and learning methods. For example, when I started school in my childhood, I had not passed any extra courses like note-taking, and I had a great struggle for learning lessons. After a while, my brother came back home, and I described my problem to him. He started to teach me some fundamental skills, such as note-taking and doing homework in the house. After one month, my marks increase sharply, but if he had not taught me those skills, I would not have been able to pass my lessons perfectly. I strongly suggest the government allocate funds to pre-schools to provide students to educate better.
Secondly, psychology has a profound impact on the education process which can boost or block the learning procedures. To be more specific, students before entering the school just spend time with their family and friends, and this made them relevant to their family, so they cannot spend a large amount of time far from their parents. In this regard, we have to provide some pre-school classes for students to help them adopt the school and new friends before facing the main lessons. A recent study shows that students who spend some days in pre-schools can adopt by schools' environments better, also they can concentrate on the lessons better. I suggest providing pre-school courses for new students to help them learn better.
To sum up, governments should allocate their fund to pre-schools in comparison to other suggested ideas. By this act, not only do we prepare students psychologically, but we also help them learn deeper by teaching them fundamental skills like note-taking and study methods.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 213, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...n, students by entering the school face a large number of lessons, and if they had not prepared b...
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Line 3, column 721, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...ses for new students to help them learn better. To sum up, governments should allocat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, i think, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2155.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13095238095 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7677063451 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504761904762 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2059521443 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.421052632 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1052631579 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52631578947 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1878568544 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629867872949 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506415894711 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113880081486 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520459662007 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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