Which one do you think is the most important factor for a student to success at college or university?
1. Tutors in university.
2. The encouragement from family and friends.
3. quality education from high school.
There is no shortage of debate about how students could be succeed at university. Many believe the most important factor for a student to success at collage is tutors in university, while others thinks quality education from high school is the important factor for students success at university. I, on the other hand, believe the encouragement from family and friends is the crucial factor for a students to success during their studying. I will address the most discernible reasons why I feel this way in the following.
To begin with, during history family and friends has been important role in individuals live. Their encouragements not only help individual to pursu his dreams, but also gives him inspiration that he can fulfill his goals. Thus, family encouragement help people to do their best and do not give up when he got low grades or even failed his exam. This vontinues effort will lead to success. My own experience is a compelling example of this. In my first year of university, I got low grads in many of my major field such as physics, math, thermodinamics. When my father saw my first semester GPA, he tried to encourage me instead of blame me for my bad marks. He told me how I did well In high school, and how impressive was my GPA. However, I thought he try to consul me, but after a while I realized that If I could get high grades in high school, I can get high grades in university as well. However, it tooks me one semester to learn how should I study in university to get high grades, but I improved my GPA gradually in next semesters, and finally I graduated with A+ GPA from university. All of this was because of my father and my other family members, because their encouragments convinced me that I can become successful student in university and do better if I enhance my effort.
Moreover, self confidence is one of the important factor for students success. Even students who is not intelligenc can be success if they have self confidence because it will lead to hard working. In order to family and friends encouragements can improve individuals self confidence, it will help student to become successful during their education. For instance, when my brother was a collage students, his friends always encouraged him, and because of that he was confidents about his ability he always worked hard to get high grades in collage.
In conclusion, it is for all the aforementioned reasons, I firmly believe that the encourgmener from friends and family members is the most important factor for students to be success at collage or university. This is because it gives students inspiration that they can fulfill their goals, and becauars it improves students self confidence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 396, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...y and friends is the crucial factor for a students to success during their studying. I wil...
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Line 3, column 755, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'tries'.
Suggestion: tries
...ssive was my GPA. However, I thought he try to consul me, but after a while I reali...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2248.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81370449679 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84202661953 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443254817987 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4884571966 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.047619048 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2380952381 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.19047619048 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364672634282 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116918734276 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129634559133 0.0737576698707 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271309182919 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135477807131 0.0645574589148 210% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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