If there’s a way to improve yourself, which one among the three choices you would take?
- take more exercise
- eat healthy food
- reduce the amount of stress
Although many believe the better way to improve themselves is to eat healthy food, while others believe they can improve themselves by reducing the amount of their stress. I, on the other hand, believe take more exercise is the better way to improve myself. I will address the most discernible reasons why I feel this way in the following.
To begin with, life is challenging these days and we experience many stress while we working or when we are in university. Accordingly, exercising give us opportunity to forget our problems, thus, I prefer to do more exercise to release my problem and unwinding for a moments. To share personal experience. When I was a university students I felt a lot of stress, because my major study was really hard. One day I decided to go jogging in a beutyful park near my apartment. What I experienced was amazing, because while I jogging I did not think to any thing else even my assignments and my personal problem, in better word I felt free. Therefore, I decided to wake up early in the morning and do some exercise in that park. Not only that, but also exercising helped me to do better in university. I realized if I could do some hard exercise I could do my assignments as well.
Moreover, I am a very busy man. Last year I decided to attend university again in different major field and I have been working in a big company as senior manager. Hence, I consume a lot of food to mantain my performance. However, todays people access to more organic foods in stores, but the major of peoples food contain a lot of pesticed. According to new survey 90 percent of all honey around the world contain pesticed. Consequently, eating food is inevitable, thus we must maintain our health from other methods. I believe exercising is a good altarnative. By exercising I can maintain my health and also it provide me apportunity to loss some weight and stay fit.
In conclusion, It is for all the aforementioned reasons, I firmly believe take more exercise is a good way to improve myself. This is because it helps me release my stress, and because it helps me stay healthy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun stress seems to be countable; consider using: 'many stresses'.
Suggestion: many stresses
...hallenging these days and we experience many stress while we working or when we are in univ...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a moment' or simply 'moments'?
Suggestion: a moment; moments
...to release my problem and unwinding for a moments. To share personal experience. When I w...
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Message: Did you mean 'I am'?
Suggestion: I am
... experienced was amazing, because while I jogging I did not think to any thing el...
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Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
...ause while I jogging I did not think to any thing else even my assignments and my persona...
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Message: Did you mean 'provides'?
Suggestion: provides
...ng I can maintain my health and also it provide me apportunity to loss some weight and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, thus, well, while, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1736.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62933333333 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80485166968 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525333333333 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1476307985 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.9090909091 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0454545455 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211270033553 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579459356467 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715767985949 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147098821486 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0834377464822 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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