Which one of the following do you think is the most important thing that parents should teach their children?
- Being helpful to others
- Being honest
- Being well organized
Some people think that being helpful to others is the most important thing parents should teach to their children. Others believe that telling children to behave honestly is a more ideal approach. Still others argue that educating kids to become well organized is preferable. Personally, I maintain that adults should definitely teach the importance of honesty to their kids more than any other value. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, adults should help children establish their relationships with friends, and telling their kids to stay honest can help them establish a better friendship. For instance, I came from a vegetarian family, and my parents told me to stay honest even though I disagree on certain topics with my friends. When I debated my friends about environmental problems and animal welfare issues, I never lied to myself just to cater to my friends. As a result, though some classmates did portray me as an annoying person, most people admired my honesty and were willing to sustain a longer reationship with me. On the other hand, my aunt taught my cousin numerous practical chores, including washing the dishes, mopping the floor, and cooking. Nevertheless, even though my cousin became a well-disciplined children, he often condemn his friends in person for throwing trash and bottle cans everywhere. Consequently, most of his classmates consider him as an unfriendly person.
In addition, parents should teach their children moral values, but telling their kids to help others cannot enhance their kids' moral values. As an example, my parents told me to give my hands to others who are in desperate need. Thus, I was confused with the definition of "in need", and I once helped my best friend, Todd, cheat on his exam. Eventually, Todd and I were caught, we both got severely disciplined by our teacher and principals, and most importantly, I realized that had my parents placed more emphasis on honesty instead of altruism, I would undoubtedly not assist my friend in cheating. Contrarily, my professor taught his kid to prioritize honesty to other moral values, and I never heard of his kid running into any troubles involving dishonesty. Without a doubt, the examples mentioned above prove that adults should undoubtedly teach their children honesty to improve their moral values.
In conclusion, I maintain that adults should definitely teach the importance of honesty to their kids due to the aforementioned reasons. After all, parents are more concerned about their children's moral character development as well as their friendship.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, honestly, nevertheless, so, still, thus, well, after all, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2173.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22355769231 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81702770826 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528846153846 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1803800331 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.65 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270978770945 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974642328272 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125005875746 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209997489398 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126776715902 0.0645574589148 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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