Which one of the following values is the most important to share with a young child (5-10 years old)?
1. Being helpful
2. Being honest
3. Being well-organized.
What is shared with children who are at the age of 5 to 10 have a direct effect on their personality and lifestyle? In my opinion, being a well-organized child is the most crucial things which must be shared with children. There are some convincing reasons, the most important of which will be discussed in the ensuing sentences.
To begin with, being an organized child helps children to become more successful in the future. As a matter of fact, they are supposed to attend the society in the near future and if they learn how to be responsible person, they would be able to make a great plan for his/her life, which assist her/him to be successful. In addition, by being well-organized, they can take the responsibilities of their daily activities, which definitely help them to be a prosperous person in the future. An example makes this viewpoint much more clear. When I was a child around 7 years old, I have been forced to organize my bed room by mother. Actually she told me” you should a clean and organized room”. For this, I practiced to do own tasks with myself because my mother taught me how to do that. Based on childhood experiences, now I am a well-disciplined person, and I got promoted in my job because of that feature. As a result, had my mother not taught me to be an organized person, I would not have a great progress in my job.
Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that one the one hand some people believe that being-organized takes children time at that age and actually it would be a waste of time, yet, on the other hand, others believe that not only it cannot be waste of time, but also they can save their time and spend it on other things. For example, they can find what they want readily without consuming their time to search for them. For this, I firmly agree with the latter viewpoint, for I believe that the more they would be an organized person, the more they can participate in many other practical programs because they have adequate time. By way of illustration, a recent study conducted by Tarbiat Modares University, reveals that the high percentage of successful children are the one who are organized person because they have enough time to learn more tasks.
To wrap it up, according to the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that if we share with children how to be well-organized, they will be a better person inasmuch as in the first place, they learn how to make plan and how to take the responsibilities of their assigned tasks, as in the second place, since they are on-organized person, they can save their time to spend on many other practical things they need
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Unpaired symbol: '“' seems to be missing
...bed room by mother. Actually she told me” you should a clean and organized room”....
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...e” you should a clean and organized room”. For this, I practiced to do own tasks ...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'practiced doing'.
Suggestion: practiced doing
... clean and organized room”. For this, I practiced to do own tasks with myself because my mother...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'great progress'.
Suggestion: great progress
...e an organized person, I would not have a great progress in my job. Furthermore, it is establ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, well, for example, in addition, as a matter of fact, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2178.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64392324094 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7932095247 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46908315565 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.9215666023 48.9658058833 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.117647059 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5882352941 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4117647059 5.45110844103 228% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327764883008 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128988449804 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11479214285 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243270242284 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117405253505 0.0645574589148 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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