It is significantly imperative that we should teach our young children some good behaviors and habits, so that they can see the results in the future and be successful individuals. While some people believe that we should teach our kids to be helpful and honest and these values are important than being well organized, others disagree with this notion and think that it is more beneficial for kids aged 5-10 to learn how they should be well organized. I am personally of the latter opinion, and I will elaborate on why I feel this way in the following paragraphs.
First of all, if we teach our kids to be well organized they can do their stuff in a better way and they will learn to do certain things in certain time, so that they can achieve what they want. So, in this way, they can learn a value and habit that will help them throughout their life and by following this habit they can be successful and prosperous persons in the future. These ages, 5-10 years old, are so important, since kids are starting to go to school, and they can shape their personalities, and we should carefully teach them to be well organized persons and grow this habit, and if we cultivate these characteristics in these ages for our kids we can be assured that they can follow them in their life and be successful in their career and education. In contrast, if we do not teach them to be organized and do their duties in the right time, they will not be able to organize their tasks and duties, and this will impact their education and career and they will not have a good foundation and habit of doing their tasks and duties.
Second of all, by teaching our kids to organize their tasks, we can tell them that they can set aside some of their times to play and get entertainment. Being well organized, does not mean that we should enforce our kids to follow strict rules and just do some tasks and learn their courses. We should teach them how to divide their time and also teach them to allocate some time to their entertainment, so that they can be mentally in a good situation too. If we do not consider this aspect and force our kids to just learn their courses and do their homeworks, this will have bad impact on their mental health. So, we can teach them how they should organize their time to do their homeworks as well as do their entertainment. As a result, we can be sure that our kids will be well organized and mentally healthy individuals in the future.
To put it all in a nutshell, for the aforementioned reasons I believe that teaching our kids to be well organized, will help them to be not only prepared for their future, but also have their entertainment and be mentally healthy people in the future.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, well, while, i feel, in contrast, as a result, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 29.0 9.8082437276 296% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 32.0 13.8261648746 231% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 99.0 43.0788530466 230% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2216.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 496.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46774193548 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4882136315 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.362903225806 0.524837075471 69% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.3889082663 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.285714286 100.406767564 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.4285714286 20.6045352989 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225866163094 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116659873556 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873953877701 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191727218914 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615172807143 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 11.7677419355 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.33 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.24 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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