Will you spend your money to buy a piece of jewelry or a ticket for a concert?
Our answer to this question may vary depending on the priorities and expectations we have in our life. In this regard, people seem to have different opinions upon the question. I personally prefer to buy a ticket for a concert instead of a piece of jewelry. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through three noticeable reasons.
To begin with, I am the kind of person who really enjoys attending social events and activities. It's always entertaining for me to see a movie or listen to a concert with a lot of people, especially movies and concerts that provoke a strong reaction. People's reaction to different parts of these activities keeps me engaged and makes me so enthusiastic that I never want to leave the place even after the performance. I am certain that experiencing the lively and exciting atmosphere of the concert hall would be an entirely good memory, which can help us maintain our good mood. It's like a good relaxation and refreshment after a day of hard work.
Secondly, music like language and literature is a great way to communicate thoughts, feelings, and ideas. Exposing to different pieces of music of any style broadens our vision and improves our creativity. This way, we can better understand how other people feel and think in different situations, which makes it easier for us to tolerate other ideas and beliefs different from ours. In my opinion, to build a better world, without war and conflict, we should initially be able to understand other people's thoughts, beliefs, and interests and respect their decisions.
Thirdly, attending a concert may offer us a great opportunity to make friends. In the concert halls, there is a large group of people who have an important common interest, i.e. music, and this can help us begin a conversation with them. Communicating with a lot of people from diverse backgrounds not only can change our mind but also gives us a great experience we'll never forget. It's the best way to get out of our comfort zone. When I was young, at the beginning of a concert, I began to talk with a cool boy who came with his friends. We continued talking about our lives, and by the end of the concert, we ended up becoming friends. After a long time, we still get along, and interestingly he is now one of my close friends, who often invites me to concerts and other activities.
In summary, based on the aforementioned arguments, there are many reasons which can persuade us to attend a concert rather than buy a piece of jewelry when we have some money. Some of them are mentioned above such as the exciting and lively atmosphere of concert halls, broadening our creativity and insight, and opportunities to make friends. However, that was a story in a nutshell. Actually, there are some other reasons and examples challenging the claim, which are not mentioned above. All in all, I firmly believe that attending social activities is a great way to remain in a good mood.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...nd interests and respect their decisions Thirdly attending a concert may offer us...
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...us a great experience well never forget Its the best way to get out of our comfort ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, thus, well, in summary, kind of, such as, talking about, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2386.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 512.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66015625 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70607847591 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490234375 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 768.6 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 512.0 20.1344086022 2543% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2386.0 100.406767564 2376% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 512.0 20.6045352989 2485% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 177.0 5.45110844103 3247% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144852687713 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144852687713 0.076458572812 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0913456788954 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569696055942 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 256.5 11.7677419355 2180% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -439.74 58.1214874552 -757% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 201.8 10.1575268817 1987% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.23 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 31.84 8.01818996416 397% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 58.0 10.002688172 580% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 206.8 10.0537634409 2057% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 58.0 10.247311828 566% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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