Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use
specific reasons and details to support your choice.
The house condition can influence our lifestyle immensely. Some groups of people hold the view that living in traditional house is more appreciated. However, the other groups make the opposite side. From my vantage point, Living in a modern house has many advantages and is more benefecial for househelds. I will elaborate on my reasons in the following paragraphs.
As technology advances, modern houses are becoming more efficient in energy consuming. We are living in a world, which cars and factories burn fossil fuels and pulate the air and the environment. These activities can impact the earth and causes global warming in the planet. By developing innovative methods and applying them in modern residental and commercial buildings, we can save the energy and prevent the global warming phenomenon. In the past, people did not consern about energy and their biuldings were not able to save that. But now, By combing different field of science and modern material, buildings not only can stop wasting a lot of energy, but also they can produce clean energy via sustainable sources such as sun and wind.
Moreover, living in the modern houses can contribute convenient lifestyle to its residents. New thechnologies are turning our life easier and more comfertable. I can mention many example to elaborate on my point. For instance my uncle’s house has a automatic curtain, which can recognise the angle of sun and consenpates itself with the volume of light. Besides he can turns on and off the lights and the music sterio with a remote control. The house has an artifact intelligent, which can recognse my uncle’s face through several cameras that are placed throught the rooms. All these instruments and gadgets help human to have a fantastic experience by living in a modern house.
In conclusion, if I have to compare the advantage and disadvantage of modern and traditional houses, I believe that the advantages of modern house definitely are more than tradidional ones. These accommodations can provide a conveniet life for us and will protect the planet earth from global warming and destructive consequences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 175, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun example seems to be countable; consider using: 'many examples'.
Suggestion: many examples
...ier and more comfertable. I can mention many example to elaborate on my point. For instance ...
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Line 3, column 253, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... For instance my uncle's house has a automatic curtain, which can recognise ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Besides,
...npates itself with the volume of light. Besides he can turns on and off the lights and ...
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Line 3, column 375, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'turn'
Suggestion: turn
...ith the volume of light. Besides he can turns on and off the lights and the music ste...
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Line 4, column 331, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l warming and destructive consequences.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, moreover, so, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1791.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17630057803 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88652515406 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557803468208 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.611323071 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.55 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157050582522 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050433361247 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499532812121 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105707845602 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346389555961 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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