You have received a gift of money. The money is enough to buy either a piece of jewelry you like or tickets to a concert you want to attend. Which would you buy? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer

What to gift or even what to buy for the money you have been gifted for is a always puzzling. Some people prefers to participate in a more experience oriented activity like a tour or concert, however I would prefer to buy something that would be a token for this memory and can be useful in future. Jewelry is a very good option for this purpose. It is long lasting and retains its value for the lifetime.

First and foremost, a nice piece of jewelry can capture the moment forever. Affection for jewlery is one of the very old traits of human being. Moreover, nowadays jewelry can be crafted according to the event which provides more personalised touch there. My own experience can be a good example for this. During my fifth birthday I received a certain amount of money, for which I bought a golden chain containing five letters from my nick name. I still have that chain and it really cherish the memory of my childhood. When ever I look at that price of jewelry it reminds me about myself and how started the sixth year of my life with new experiences like schooling new friends etc.

Furthermore, jewelry retains its value very well. After money, Gold is sort of second currency in the world. Though its tough to sell a piece of memory infused in gold, critical times in life sometimes make us to do so. In such scenarios jewelry can be a very helpful in fulfilling some other larger aspects of life. Though sad, I have seen such a example during the days when my friend's father was very sick. After spending all of the savings, the last days of uncle's treatment was being covered by selling the gold ornaments they received during their wedding program. Good news is with the treatment completed properly, uncle is living a healthy life now which would have been impossible without compromising those precious gifts as gold.

Finally, jewelry has a larger effect in the macro economy. As long before, when people lived in small groups, their wealth were judged with the amount of jewelry and other live stock they posses. The same implies in the national level economy today. The biggest example of this is India, which is the country having the largest amount of gold in the hands of its people. People in India tries to save money and many of them do it in the form of gold based jewelry. As a result the population posses such significant amount of gold that it is counted as a big part of the whole Indian economy. Moreover, gold being traded internationally, India's amount of gold has an influential control over the golbal market as well. Hence buying a jewelry with the gifted money equates to participate in a larger economic activity.

Thus keeping the above points in mind it is fair to conclude that buying a jewelry with your money can keep they memory forever, can be useful during the hard times of one life and of course it is part of macro economy that can even empower a country's economy compared to other's. And so, I will prefer buying a jewelry instead of attending a concert with any such money I receive as gift in the future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ur or concert, however I would prefer to buy something that would be a token for ...
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Line 1, column 290, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...token for this memory and can be useful in future. Jewelry is a very good option for this...
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Line 3, column 484, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cherishes'?
Suggestion: cherishes
.... I still have that chain and it really cherish the memory of my childhood. When ever I...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'scenarios'' or 'scenario's'?
Suggestion: scenarios'; scenario's
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Suggestion: Hence,
...control over the golbal market as well. Hence buying a jewelry with the gifted money ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, moreover, really, second, so, still, thus, well, of course, sort of, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2549.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 549.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64298724954 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84053189512 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49667713252 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493624772313 0.524837075471 94% => OK
syllable_count: 809.1 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1415732038 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0357142857 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6071428571 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82142857143 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20419760715 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0512379262813 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610727760728 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118939919151 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0526929081784 0.0645574589148 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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