In today's world, average life age for humans is 80 years. Depending on personal experience, personal type or emotional concern, we find that some hold opinion that young people enjoy life more than older people do, some have negative attitude. From my view of point, I agree with the statement that young people enjoy life more than older people do. My arguments on this point are in following passages.
One of my primary reason is that young people physically and mentally more energetic than older people. They have wilness to experience new things more than older people. On other hand, enjoy feeling is based on endhorphine hormon of body and young people biologically tend to have more endorphine hormon than older people. For example, In aquaparks, entertainment places or nightclubs, genereally, we can't find much older people instead younger ones. They usually go to peaceful places to feel relax. Hence, we can say that young people search enjoy more than older people.
Another reason why I agree with the statements is that old people have a lot of ilness which prevent them to have enjoy. It is clear that these ilnesses are big problem for main function of life for them so they don't have time to enjoy. For example, when an old people is surviving with a cancer type, how could he enjoy the life. On the other hand, young people have much more time to spend enjoyable time without any ilness concern. Therefore, it is very hard to say that old people have time to do enjoy.
In a word, rules of nature point out that when time passing, every creature will be older and it will time to survive instead of enjoy. Consequently, young people much more have time and body conditions to have enjoy rather than older people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 403, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...nt places or nightclubs, genereally, we cant find much older people instead younger ...
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Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'enjoyed'.
Suggestion: enjoyed
...ot of ilness which prevent them to have enjoy. It is clear that these ilnesses are bi...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... main function of life for them so they dont have time to enjoy. For example, when a...
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Line 7, column 212, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'enjoyed'.
Suggestion: enjoyed
...e have time and body conditions to have enjoy rather than older people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, hence, if, really, so, therefore, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76821192053 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3144629484 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493377483444 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 459.9 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9812523272 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.7058823529 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7647058824 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58823529412 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.605502720467 0.236089414692 256% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.232051174813 0.076458572812 303% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.180557804402 0.0737576698707 245% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.409076080529 0.150856017488 271% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126856350889 0.0645574589148 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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