Young People enjoy life more than older people do
There is no shortage debate about whether young people enjoy life more than older people. In my Opinion, young adults have more enjoy their life instead of older people. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, young adults have more time to enjoy their life than that of older people. They do not have a lot of responsibilities like older people do. My own experience is a compelling example. I do not have many burdens in my life, such as take care of family, home, and a lot of tasks in the offices, which are those things that older people do. I have fewer responsibilities than my parents so that I can spend my life to have fun such as playing the game with my friends, go to the beach, and vacation. Moreover, I do not have to work to earn money and save money for future which are two things that older people do. However, if my parents want to enjoy their life, they will prefer to their children's favour, such as choosing movies, foods, or the recreation places. They have limitation to enjoy their preferences. Sometimfavoues, they will resist their will and prioritize their children needs. On the other hand, the young people are likely more option choosing their favours. They can gather with their friends, go abroad, or hiking. they can do whatever they want.
Secondly, young adults have more energy to do any activities than those of older people. Their body still can support their heavy activities, such as playing football, basketball, badminton, which are those sports that older people may not do. These activities will spend much energy and need maximum function of their body organ. For instance, older people, who are above fifty years old, are not able to play these games anymore. Their bodies have decreased the ability to support these sports. In addition, they tend to tire early because the energy quickly drop. In addition, my own experience is a compelling example. When I was a student, I could play football at night without feeling exhausted. I could spend many hours to compete with my friends. Now, I feel tired quickly when I played it after office hours.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that young people can enjoy their life more than the older ones. This is because they do not have a lot of responsibilities like older people and they have more energies.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1946.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71186440678 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46621075238 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445520581114 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1362556619 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.0740740741 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2962962963 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.03703703704 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.419199686524 0.236089414692 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135869008481 0.076458572812 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.16110974723 0.0737576698707 218% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.363479504621 0.150856017488 241% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138918351058 0.0645574589148 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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