Young people enjoy life more than older people do Do you agree or disagree

Nowadays, with the circumstance about aging population worsening, the gap between young people and older people is becoming wider step by step. Therefore a discussion is appealing more public attention,which is whether young people enjoy life better than older people or not. Some people support this opinion while others hold the opposite statement.From my respective, both of them are enjoying their lives in their own way. No one does better than the other one.

When it comes to the characteristic of young people, we can easily point out that they have the coverage to take risk and are willing to creation. Meanwhile they are open to the new and have the active attitude to try. And they always keep abreast with time. Therefore they may can get happiness on ease and then enjoy life better. Moreover, according to the physical condition, young people have a wider range of activities in which they can engage.For instance, they may take skiing or extreme sports and some sort of life-threatening activities.

However, young people, as the major part of society, have more pressure from various perspectives. Some of them still deal with challenges in campus, such as numerous assignment and lectures, complicated knowledge and exams. And more of them are struggling in workplace ,faced with heavy work and intense competition. Hence, they are so busy and frustrated. So they barely have time to enjoy their life. Meanwhile, the most of older people are retired and already save amount of money. Compared to young people living the stressful and busy life, older people have more time and attention to enjoy their life without pressure. Therefore they can spend the best of the day to do what they like and earn leisure and pleasure from it. They even have the ability to travel any where in any time without plan and schedule.

All in all, I believed that both of young people and older people have the reasons and abilities to enjoy their lives greatly. I support that because young people are more willing to adventure and partake a wider range of activities, while older people without pressure have more leisure time and energy to enjoy life.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, while, for instance, sort of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97513812155 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57687429398 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519337016575 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8430906066 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.05 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368933110221 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112495773703 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119456824531 0.0737576698707 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255553657478 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104632095169 0.0645574589148 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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