Young people enjoy life more than older people do.
Do you agree or disagree?
The young people and the older people can enjoy their life in their own ways. But, when we go to determine that how much the old people enjoy their life compared to the young people do, I concur with the idea that the younger people enjoy life more than the older people do. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the health condition is a big fact in this regard. The younger people are often more fit both physically and mentally than the older people. So, even if the older people want to enjoy their life by doing various things they like, most of the time, they cannot do that for their physical problems. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I live in a big family with my parents, siblings, uncles, cousins, grandfather, and grandmother. We often go to family tours during our vacations. Last time, we went to see the hill tracks of Bandarban which is a very beautiful place of Bangladesh. But, my grandparents could not go with us because of their critical health conditions. My grandfather was suffering from heart problems and my grandmother had weakness issues. So, due to their illness, they could not go with us though they had a great interest in seeing the beautiful nature of Bandarban.
Secondly, in this modern world, everyone is running for their career. Most of the young people whether doing their studies or doing their jobs in various sectors so that they can secure a good position in the future in this competitive world. As a result, nowadays, it is a common case that the other members of a family do not get enough time to give company to their elders. It sounds pathetic but it is a true story of this contemporary world. I know a family which lives near my house where the old parents remain alone at home all day long while the others go to their offices or colleges. So, the old parents do not get the company for the whole day and they pass the whole day talking with one another. Maybe they also want to go to movies, maybe they have the desire to visit different places in the country, maybe they are willing to meet their distant relatives. But, the other members often get tired when they come back home from their work and they remain busy on the weekends to do the other task which they are not able to do in the weekdays for the shortage of time. Thus, the older members of the family cannot fulfill their desire only because the other younger members of the family don't have enough time to give them company. On the other hand, the younger members of the family can definitely have fun in their colleges or workplaces with their colleagues and friends.
To conclude, I strongly believe that younger people of our society get more chance to enjoy their life when compared to the older people because the older people have health issues and they often don't get the company with whom they can enjoy their days.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, i feel, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2397.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 530.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52264150943 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79809637944 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24805996026 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441509433962 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5697783638 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.875 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0833333333 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283919616219 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0885738407893 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146684461617 0.0737576698707 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262094953149 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.16561774342 0.0645574589148 257% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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