Young people enjoy life more than older people do.
Do you agree or disagree?
Whether young people enjoy life more than older people is ongoing debate among people. It is intriguing question because regarding this issue is differentiate from the individual perspective. In my opinion, I disagree this statement because, in my view, young people does not have enough time to enjoy and money. I will explain the reasons as followings:
First and foremost, young people are busy to find what they really enjoy to. To be specific, they normally study in many fields, which necessary many time. Sometime, it require them to avoid enjoying life spending more time ti study in the library. Personally, I never saw a person who are satisfied with his/her study while they are in the library. Most of them keep thinking the library are kind of cage. At first glance, young people have enough time to spend their enjoyable things such as play game, signtseeing, or so one. But they normally do study because of the social requirement for the educational equality like K-12 system in the United States. Thus, many of young people tend to find their happiness after they found a secured job. For example, my father ussed to dream traveling across the world. But he realized that it was too young to travel alone so he decided to get a job first. Yet, among 20 years in the job, he almost forget what he first wanted to be. After retired, he finally had enough time to travel around the world. Now he says that finally he can enjoy life.
Moreover, young people have no enough money to enjoy life. In fact, money is an important fact to enjoy something. Of course, there are something enjoyable without money such as walking but it is limited, A national-wide study showed that the main reason why young people study is they want to earn money to spend their hobbies. Moreover, the study showed that young people normally do the study unintentionally. Conversely, older people have relatively more money since they are spend more life. Thus, older people can spend more money to enjoy some expensive activities such as golf, cruise travel, and so forth.
To sum up, older people enjoy life more than young people as following reasons: they have more time and money. All things considered, it is my belif that this issue has been delivered with the mentioned above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, if, moreover, really, regarding, so, thus, while, as to, for example, in fact, kind of, of course, such as, in my opinion, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82951653944 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40562062657 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508905852417 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2903250041 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.0833333333 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.375 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36873241817 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115840245811 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127814839398 0.0737576698707 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.275312330647 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645943376761 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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