young people more independent today or in the past
Whether young people are more independent and self-reliant today or in the past depends on the lens through which one is looking. Some may argue that due to younger marriage age in the past and encountering the responsibilities of handling a family sooner, young pepople were more independent in the past. On the other hand, opponents of this idea may believe that global surge in the use of technology has contributed to the youth being less reliant on their parents. I agree with the latter. and in my opinion, our young generations today have far more self-confidence and independency. I will demonstrate further as follows.
First, although family responsibilities would usually fall upon a young person sooner in the past, the changing ambient of the world today presents the youth with different kinds of challenges that they have to overcome themselves. In the rapidly alternating societies today, there is noticeable gap between parents values and their young children. What we see every day on media is a representative of the aforementioned occurance. We routinely observe adolescence today gathering and practicing the the principles of human rights, environment preservation, protection against global warming, enabling vulnerable populations, and so on. These major differences between young people and their parents , and also their variuos and sometimes opposing perceptions of the world, has led the youth to be more independent today. For instance, I have a cousin whose goal in life is to vistit less priviledged areas and help the people. When she communicated this idea to her parents they didi not approve and asked her to attend a graduate program instead. This forced her to make her decisions alon when her parents were not supportive.
Secondly, in the recent years, time has been ripe for the flourishing of technology and social media. Almost everyone today utilizes social media platforms for various purposes from promoting their business, to education, and especially gain insight on the world. On that note, the impact of such platforms on people and young people -who are the major user group- is undeniable. There are tremendous promotions of independency, confidence, finding your own path, and such concepts on social media. Hence, since these characteriscts are viewed as more appreciable and accepted by peers in the eyes of the youth today, they are presumably trying to develop and maintain these qualities.
In conclusion, due to the notable differences between young people and their previous generation, and also vast expansions of technology and social media which support independency, young people today are more independent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
... through which one is looking. Some may argue that due to younger marriage age in the...
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Suggestion: And
...their parents. I agree with the latter. and in my opinion, our young generations to...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...lescence today gathering and practicing the the principles of human rights, environment...
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...lescence today gathering and practicing the the principles of human rights, environment...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s between young people and their parents , and also their variuos and sometimes op...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2259.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35308056872 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02395764091 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554502369668 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6438675866 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.95 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.438720570288 0.236089414692 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115779534766 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142401401423 0.0737576698707 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288647633351 0.150856017488 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10944685842 0.0645574589148 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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