Nowadays, with increasing world complexity, youth activities can have a considerable effect on societies. However, many people believe that young individuals prefer not to spend enough time helping their society. Although youth have done several beneficial activities for their communities, I, personally, believe that it is not enough due to several conspicuous reasons which will be elaborated as follows.
To begin with, Youth do not have enough time, to spend it on other social issues. As young people's income is lower than the others, they have to spend more time on their job, which has a direct influence on their leisure time, which means that they even do not have enough time for resting. An example can drive this notion dramatically home. My mom retired about one year ago. As can be revealed through her activities, her lifestyle has completely changed after retirement. Now she can easily spend a lot of time on charities, such as Mahak institute, and poor people. However, she did not use to give that much time to help society when she was young. Accordingly, youth do not give enough time on societies, for their time occupies with a lot of job projects.
Moreover, often elderly people have more efficient power. It is crystal clear that youth do not have enough experience to guide and help societies’ promotion in correct ways. Therefore, they cannot have a noticeable effect on communities as they should listen and learn from their elderlies. As can be seen, the youngest president of America was Obama who was about 45 years old when he became president. It is because individuals do not trust young ones easier, for they do not have enough information and knowledge to help their communities. Therefore, young people prefer to learn instead of doing mistakes unintentionally.
In conclusion, I, totally, accept that youth do not pay enough attention to their societies. I believe that it is because of the fact that they have to work harder to get promotion on their job and earn money. Also, as they do not have beneficial experiences, they do not have any power to be efficient. The two previous paragraphs described my viewpoint in detail.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
..., and poor people. However, she did not use to give that much time to help society ...
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Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...o their societies. I believe that it is because of the fact that they have to work harder to get promoti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01101928375 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78218639446 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523415977961 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.4208024394 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.619047619 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2857142857 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47619047619 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399258093637 0.236089414692 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119838900445 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114099328532 0.0737576698707 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246842340937 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0820527306909 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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