Young people today are less dependent on their parents than in the past.
I agree with the statement that young people are more independent on their parents in nowadays than in the past. Young people are living in a more developed society with advanced science and technology, and completed social welfare system that help them to develop independent living, studying and thinking. Besides, young people have realized the importance of independence when raising their kids.
To begin with, young people have much more information sources than before which allow them to improve their independent thinking. With the development of computer and internet, young people now have spent a plenty of time online, using social media like Facebook and Instagram to contact with friends and absorb information from all around the world. My personal experience is a clear example on explaining the impact of internet on my independent decision on my university major. Before I entered university, I did a thorough research on the universities and majors that I was interested in, by directly browsing their website. I learnt the program curriculums and requirements from every university’s website which helped me to decide independently where I would go and have my undergraduate study. In the past, people didn’t have a variety of information sources. When my parents were in high school, the sources that they got to know the universities and majors were mainly their parents, teachers and alumni.
Besides, young people now have more education opportunities because of the development of economy and social welfare system. More and more people can afford university tuition than before. Teachers and parents play very important role in students’ study in primary school and middle school. But regarding to the university study, the subjects are normally more comprehensive and complicated. Thus, young people need to develop independent studying skills such as reading literatures, writing papers and attending field trips.
Furthermore, people have a realization on the importance of independence and thus young people now are raised in a more independent way. An increasing number of parents send their kids to boarding school. Take me as an example again, I attended boarding school since my middle school study. Living in boarding school, I have learnt to dealt with the balance between study and extracurricular activities, communication with roommates and classmates and time management skills. The boarding school experiences were really important to my independence.
To sum up, I think young people have more independent living, studying and thinking in nowadays than in the past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 84, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...e are more independent on their parents in nowadays than in the past. Young people are livi...
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Line 3, column 518, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'thorough research'.
Suggestion: thorough research
...jor. Before I entered university, I did a thorough research on the universities and majors that I w...
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Line 9, column 85, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...dependent living, studying and thinking in nowadays than in the past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, really, regarding, so, thus, i think, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2223.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47536945813 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96762870186 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495073891626 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 692.1 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6048659565 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.857142857 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250877780897 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0960544239739 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0961000077848 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181058772365 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685432298321 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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