Your city is trying to construct a new building in order to attract more tourists. Which do you think would be the best tourist attraction?
1) A historical museum
2) A shopping mall
3) An indoor amusement park
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Make sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
In this age of technological advancements and renovations taking place all-round the globe, people have somewhat forgotten the importance of historical monuments and places of rich ancient culture. People are bringing in modifications only for their own needs and have disregarded the rich history or cultural characteristics of a particular city or a country. So, to instill in them the vitality of the historic traditions and to recall the importance of history, I would definitely encourage my government to build a historical museum rather than a shopping mall or an amusement park. I believe in building a historical museum due to the following reasons.
In my view, to protect a city's rich culture, the people of that city must get a chance to experience the past. People will only feel connected to their city's history if they can feel the vibe of that time which creates a realtionship between them and the city's history. Historical monuments or museums are the best way to develop this relation. I remember when I was young and visited a historic museum on my school trip. I remember that trip even now after almost ten years. The knowledge of history, the life of people in the past, the experience of rich culture I got by visiting the museum will always stay along with me. This is one reason why I feel that building a historic museum will be the best idea among the three options.
Nowadays, almost every city in the world has a shopping mall and an amusement park. Yes, I do believe that they are also essential to the city but I dont feel that their importance is on top of a historical museum. The pivotal role of a historical museum is also visible when people remember their historical heroes on their birth anniversaries and death anniversies. It is the information aquired from the museums that help people to remember their great heroes and get inspired by them. For example, the historical museum of China is one of the most populous places in the world. The reason for its popularity is the people of China and the foreigners giving it so much importance and making it one of the most visited places of all time. This example tells us that when a historical museum is aquainted with the best facilites, fine infrastructure it can also attract a lot of people and gain popularity.
So, therefore to conclude I would like to say that constructing a museum would be a better idea as it would protect the aspects of history from vanishing and thereby inspire people by looking at their heroes from the past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, still, therefore, for example, i feel, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78409090909 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77363528351 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454545454545 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 675.9 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6953600336 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.789473684 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1578947368 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89473684211 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208862064342 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740717812691 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561233988664 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1318412827 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264714366482 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 10.002688172 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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