People should undertake risky action only after they have carefully considered its consequences
The term 'risk' refers to an action taken at a certain point of time when the person is not aware of its consequences. The consequences may be good or even worsen the situation. So the person has to wisely decide before taking this step as it may make or break his life on certain occasions. According to the author, a risky action should only be taken after carefully considering its consequences. However, in my view, 'Where there is a risk, there is a reward'. So rather than thinking a thousand times and squaring on a decision, this action must be taken audaciously and accept whatever happens in the future with an open attitude.
When we are taking a risky action, we must trust our instincts and try and remain positive so that we can accept what's coming in the future gracefully. People nowadays have many decisions to make that cannot be risk-free. So we cannot sit hand-in-hand and let things happen. We have to take bold decisions at various points in our lives and we must not run away or think a hundred times before making these decisions. For instance, consider the stock market. The stock market is a direct example of a place where risk is involved at every step. So, if a person worries about the future that he might incur losses if one takes risks, it will never make one take bold decisions. To make profits, one has to take an audacious step, without thinking about the future. Similarly, in my view, at every juncture, a risk is involved. So instead of stressing about what's going to happen in the future, we must live in the present and do what suits us the best.
Furthermore, if we think about the science and technology department, scientists nowadays, take huge risks while performing new experiments without bothering about the results. If they take every step after thinking a lot, they might never be able to take that step. Similarly, if the scientists worry at every step, they might never be able to make advancements in technology or bring any developments in their fields. However, I agree that sometimes taking some actions boldly, can harm us at some point. But we can not stop trusting us and taking these actions. If we fail at a certain point, these experiences are what teach us to be assured even more in the future. So taking risk is a part of life and we must never hesitate if we are fully sure about a decision.
In conclusion, I would like to say that nobody has seen the future. We cannot predict what will be the outcome of a particular decision. Some decisions might bring glory while others can stymie our progress. But to take these risks is what makes us better prepared for what is to come in the future and makes us even tougher to fight when a decision does not come out in our favor.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ecision does not come out in our favor.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, similarly, so, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2258.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 494.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57085020243 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51504349604 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467611336032 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 725.4 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6523299471 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6296296296 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2962962963 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85185185185 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1185768033 0.243740707755 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0385279078849 0.0831039109588 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0865084443481 0.0758088955206 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0770917953415 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751346417088 0.0667264976115 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 14.1392134831 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 12.1639044944 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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