In contemporary society, where a university degree is nearly an indispensable qualification for a satisfying job, it comes as no surprise that selecting appropriate duration of the study required by the major has emerged as a controversial issue. Some adhere to the belief that a shorter study process should be favored to get involved in full-time work as soon as possible, whereas an alternative strategy is to have a prolonged study for more employment options. If my friends are stuck in such a dilemma, I will recommend the later approach without the slightest hesitation and in the ensuing paragraphs the rationale behind this suggestion will be further elucidated.
The foremost factor tipping the competitive edge away from the former to the latter is the career development. Albeit students quickly accomplishing the university education presumably master more practical technique in practice, the crippling disadvantage of the paucity of theoretical knowledge will leave their chance of advancing their career hanging by a thread. My brother’s experience is a compelling instance of this point. He is a seasoned factory worker possessing mastery of operating the machine. Nevertheless, I can still recall his compunctious appearance when he complained to me about his bitter defeat in the competition of promotion. His rival had acquired encyclopedic knowledge about the mechanism of machine in the long school time, thereby devising an original ingenious structure, which dramatically curtailed the failure rate. On the contrary, my brother was afflicted by the shortage of leisure time which could be utilized to compensate the deficiency in the foundamental knowledge for the mounting work pressure.
Another significant reason that warrants attention is that the more employment opportunities we are blessed with, the more likely we can find the niche in the workplace. As is often the case, the applicants with little research experience are more than likely to be excluded from the technical position. Instead, they will be distributed to the job that necessitates limited sophisticated knowledge such as the salespersons, the operator and so on. However, provided that a job seeker is a person who has blazing ardor to increase the production efficiency by a revolutionary production which is the fruit of the long time research, his ambition will conceivably be aborted merely for his weak foundation in research.
With the career prospect and the employment opportunity taken into consideration, we can logically reach a conclusion that it is more advisable for my friends to spend more years in school.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, whereas, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2230.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45232273839 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22031529401 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58924205379 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.5427017638 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.666666667 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2666666667 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06666666667 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0738805228309 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0216956019562 0.076458572812 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0298342269274 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0486251202234 0.150856017488 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383808021613 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 11.7677419355 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 58.1214874552 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.34 8.01818996416 129% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 86.8835125448 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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