Your friend has the opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice, and why?
A major that would allow him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner (so that he would begin to work full-time quickly). Or
A major that requires many years of study that would provide him with more employment opportunities and offers in the future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern world, education plays a significant role in people's lives. Although some individuals believe that, students should start a job as soon as possible, I, personally, do believe that longer education time can be more beneficial than shorter one for two reasons which are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, in order for a person to be successful in a job, a deep knowledge is required. Needless to say, the more time a person spends to study in a major, the wider and deeper knowledge he or she can achieve. It is obvious that being an expert in a field of study can come about a better career performance for people; thus they can make much more money and live on welfare. There is little doubt, however, getting a degree sooner tends to decrease the opportunity of mastering the major. If a person has a shallow knowledge and less ability in his or her field of study, which is one of the consequences of less-time-consuming majors, they possibly cannot be hired for positions with high-income. As a result, hardly can be guaranteed a person's success with majors which provide a skin-deep knowledge.
Additionally, having more opportunity to choose, individuals can make a choice fitting with their condition. With this in mind, spending many a year is valuable as far as making a deep knowledge in a major is concerned. Of so great significance are these choices that can affect a person's future life. To illustrate this point, let me tell an example. As all of us know, occupation makes up the main portion of individuals' lives. When a person has quite a few options to choose, he or she can easily find a career which is completely compatible with him or her life condition in terms of income, location, colleague, to name but a few. Majors needing less time to study, nonetheless, are more likely to limit people's selection because of having less experience and knowledge. Indeed, such persons have to tolerate difficult conditions--that is low salary, less opportunity to thrive, and even maybe working in a bad atmosphere. What will happen to such employees if companies want to decrease the number of their workforce after a while?
In the light of these crucial results, I strictly am of the opinion that spending many a year, in order to achieve high-level job opportunities, is priceless. Getting a degree in less time and starting a job immediately after that, are more likely to culminate deprivation a person of a prosperous life in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 65, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'deep knowledge'.
Suggestion: deep knowledge
...for a person to be successful in a job, a deep knowledge is required. Needless to say, the more ...
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Line 3, column 746, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...As a result, hardly can be guaranteed a persons success with majors which provide a ski...
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Line 3, column 788, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'skin-deep knowledge'.
Suggestion: skin-deep knowledge
...rsons success with majors which provide a skin-deep knowledge. Additionally, having more opportuni...
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Line 5, column 179, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'deep knowledge'.
Suggestion: deep knowledge
...any a year is valuable as far as making a deep knowledge in a major is concerned. Of so great si...
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Line 5, column 280, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...cance are these choices that can affect a persons future life. To illustrate this point, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, thus, while, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2067.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86352941176 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95607146015 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548235294118 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2649658159 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.789473684 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3684210526 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15789473684 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160203739308 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475958696288 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491651733451 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0877529890804 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464664885991 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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