Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Companies should pay for employees to get a university degree.
In today's modern world employees play an important role in the success of a country. Although some people think that companies are in charge of paying education expenses for employees, I, personally, do believe that companies should spend that money on other aspects -- that is training expertise skills and giving rewards for employees.
To begin with, although having employees with a university degree can be useful for developing a company, hardly can be guaranteed a person's being effective only by considering it. This means that there are other criteria which are more important than a university degree for success, one of which is having experience. For example, in most companies, there are persons who do not have a degree but instead of that, they have valuable experience which has been achieved under different situations. As one philosopher, whose name eludes me at this moment, once said, "An experienced man is like treasure." Therefore, of so great significance is the experience that it would not be exaggerating to say that it can affect whole performance of a company. When a person learns something by experience rather than reading just some books, he or she will never forget it and not make a mistake. However, if a person does not have enough experience in a work, they will do their task with some errors, which will make damages for a company. With this in mind, the performance of individuals without experience is less likely to culminate in success even with a Ph.D. degree. Therefore, in order for employees to have a perfect performance, companies should provide conditions to train them and increase their experience instead of paying for a university degree.
Additionally, companies can give a reward to their employees in order that increases their motivation for better work. So far-reaching is the impact of motivation in a work that no one can deny it. As far as I am concerned, motivation is a "golden key" that can come about advantages such as success and flourish. It is clear that existing of a stimulus--that is the reward--individuals try to make more effort and have better performance than past so that they will be able to improve their state. Unfortunately, this factor is ignored in most companies which just pay attention to their employees' university. Recently, one study which is done by Yale University shows that the more motivation a person has, the better performance he or she can have in different activities. Hence, such a beneficial individuals can be of indescribable value to companies. With lack of motivation, however, persons never try to do their best and as a result, companies are less likely to reach their apex efficiency.
Last but not least, individuals are said to not usually take things for granted when they do not pay any cost for them. Consequently, if companies pay the expense of employees' education, rarely can be assured that they will use this opportunity properly. It is evident that this is nothing short of wasting time and money for companies, which makes them lag of behind in comparison to other companies. Thus this way is not beneficial neither for employees nor companies.
In the light of these crucial criteria, I strictly believe that companies should not be in charge of paying the expense for the education of their employees. There are criteria more important than a university degree for employees without which they would not help to the development of a company. By paying attention to other aspects instead of a degree, however, the company can thrive effectively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 30.0 11.0286738351 272% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3012.0 1977.66487455 152% => OK
No of words: 593.0 407.700716846 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07925801012 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93473315629 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99077852808 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445193929174 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 947.7 618.680645161 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7436241642 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.48 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.72 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.32 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252247956791 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833787671938 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682593613519 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175645728153 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434265685563 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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