Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's fast-paced and human-oriented world, famous people are of great influence on individuals not only in their own country but also all around the world. With this in mind, there is a controversy whether these celebrities most affect the youth or otherwise. I, personally, do believe that their impact on the young is more than others, for three reasons elaborated below.
To begin with, the youth usually select athletes and actors as their role model. Such celebrities have a great reputation and popularity among adolescents. Of so great influence are these individuals' behavior, clothes, makeup, to name but a few that most of the younger people change their lifestyle. For example, in most countries, young boys and girls follow their role model private life in the media such as Facebook, and Instagram, and try to collect all of their movie and song archives.
Equally important is the sensitive age of youngsters, maturity. One of the most important requirements of this age is seen by other people. As far as I am concerned, the youth usually try to seem lookalike celebrities in order to get fame. For example, most of the boys who are followers of a singer tend to cut their hair just like him, or maybe they copy their clothed wearing style. Hardly can anyone affected older people, however, because they passed the sensitive age of maturity and now they are hard-bitten individuals.
Last but not least, today younger people have more leisure time than older individuals. Going to a concert, or the movie is one of the common entertainments among the young. For example, whenever my friends and I go to a concert, most participants are young and there are few old people among them. Having more connected with the youth, celebrities are more likely to affect them. On the other hand, the old have a tendency to spend most of their free time with family or in a quiet place such as a park or have a picnic with their peers in nature.
I the light of these critical reasons, I am of the opinion that famous members of a society can influence youngsters, adolescents, and children more than the old. They can affect the youth not only because of being a role model but also because of their sensitive age and more free time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...l of their movie and song archives. Equally important is the sensitive age of young...
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Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...get fame. For example, most of the boys who are followers of a singer tend to cut their...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r sensitive age and more free time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, for example, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1868.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80205655527 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64857353048 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483290488432 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8165324781 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3157894737 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4736842105 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.89473684211 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178809308905 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583574022571 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0375786076061 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102489092887 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0212923383251 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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