Imagine that you are a student at a university where there are long breaks between semesters. The university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break.
a. Students must take a course which has no direct connection to their major (for example, students majoring in engineering take a course in fine arts or social sciences)
b. Students must volunteer to work on a project in their university’s city or hometown to improve some aspect of life in the city or hometown. For example, a student can work with primary school children who need help with their homework.
Which one do you prefer? Present reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern world, universities as a bed of students' training can provide good opportunities for active participation of students in a community. In this regard, universities have provided plans --such as taking an irrelevant course or doing a volunteer work in order to improve some facet of life in a city-- which choosing one of them is compulsory for students. Although studying a course in a new filed would need less effort sometimes, I prefer to experience voluntary work for several reasons.
I strongly believe that doing some voluntary work not only can have much merit for a student, but have some benefit for the government as well. The first big advantage is that doing a voluntary work can lead to learn and obtain information about different jobs for a student, and in so doing, their professional experience would be increased. In addition, it would probably reduce extra costs such as training for the government. For example, when a student who wants to be a teacher in the future participates in a teamwork, he or she can learn camaraderie, being a member of a group, and doing duties together with other colleagues without any costs. Undoubtedly, such person can have a much impressive performance and will be able to teach this “crucial hands-on experience” to his or her students. However, taking courses which will not be used in one's job in the future is absurd. As a matter of fact, this probably wastes time, money, and effort for both students and the government.
Without any doubt, in a perfect world, all individuals as a human being have a responsibility towards the country in which they live, society, and other people. To illustrate my point, I would like to provide a quote from the leader of the Indian independence movement. As Mahatma Gandhi once said that, “The best way to find yourself is to lose yourself in the service of others.” It is clearly understandable that voluntary work can be an excellent opportunity so that all people can behave with each other in a kindly, friendly, and respectful manner. As far as I am concerned, sense of worthiness, usefulness, and satisfaction are the valuable results of helping and not taking each other for granted. Moreover, these good feelings can bring about to live a happy, peaceful, and amazing life for all people. Indeed, the happiest people are not those getting more, but those giving more. Nevertheless, an irrelevant course to one's field of study does not have any results apart from getting bored. This is mainly because students possibly are not interested in subjects which are different from their major so much so that subjects taught in these courses are quickly forgotten by students. Statistics show that in most cases students have gotten a low score for such an irrelevant course. It is evident that students cannot have a good academic performance unless they are interested in a subject which they have to study. Therefore, doing a course which is not related to students’ major tends to have a more negative effect in comparison to benefit. This is something similar to evaluating a Biology major based on their knowledge of American history.
In conclusion, despite the fact that doing a course can take lesser time of a student, I prefer to be a useful person and by doing my civic responsibilities help other people, thereby improving my skills and abilities, and gaining new experience as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, apart from, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a matter of fact, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2865.0 1977.66487455 145% => OK
No of words: 576.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97395833333 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89897948557 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93212617124 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493055555556 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 910.8 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.3214511542 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.565217391 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0434782609 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21739130435 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224453905936 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070895745055 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538345948541 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158357059439 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439709760913 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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