Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The more money people have, the more they should contribute to charity.
It is clear that in today's world having money play an important role in any individuals' lives. Although some people think that they should spend their money for anything but charity, I, personally, do believe that charitable donations can bring us quite a few benefits--two of which are having a good society and living a happy life--which are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, the burgeoning of a community depends on people who live on welfare in which. It is evident that the less gap in terms of wealth is among members of a country, the more peaceful life they tend to live. As John F. Kennedy once said, “If a free society cannot help the many who are poor, it cannot save the few who are rich.” Therefore, individuals who are rich should try to eliminate problems such as poverty which is a root of all adversity. Of so great significance is this problem that it can affect the lives of all strata of a society. Moreover, wealthy people by charitable donations not only can use this excellent opportunity to help others with a monetary issue but also can bring a better life for their offspring. On the other hand, if in a society, anyone thinks only about himself or herself and does not pay attention to others, indeed, the amount of crime, theft, and murder will increase. In such conditions, rarely can be guaranteed to thrive of societies in general and individuals in particular.
Secondly, people tend to experience more satisfaction and happiness in their lives. Although some people think that by having money they can reach anything, I believe otherwise. There are concepts” such as love, friendship, kindness to name but a few in one’s life which cannot be achieved only by money. Rather, it is the donation that can bring us such good feelings. Thus, it would not be exaggerated if one says that by helping other people, he or she can experience more pleasure. The result of studies which is done in Yale University can be a concrete evidence for this claim. They show that philanthropists, who are interested in participating charities by donating their time, money, or food, have less stress and blood pressure than other people. The reason is that being kind toward others can increase the level of oxytocin in the body, which makes one feels happy and live a healthier life than others do. A person, however, without experiencing happiness how can have the motivation to continue their progress and make money. As a result, lack of contentment will be as a “missing link” for their flourish, which possibly cannot be made up for with other things.
In the light of these critical points, I strictly believe that giving money to charities is likely to culminate in benefits for both givers and people who are in need. Although some rich individuals tend to ignore low-level strata of a society, I prefer to die as a useful person rather than a rich person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun in seems to be countable; consider using: 'few ins'.
Suggestion: few ins
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in general, in particular, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2430.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8502994012 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75060184228 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516966067864 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6422184337 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.454545455 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7727272727 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164747104582 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519931409623 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516725129935 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107458527093 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517998008701 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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