In the modern era, people experience controversial and
intertwined social relationships. It is clearly understood that in
such a sophisticated world, the success and happiness of people
is related to participation of other members from various social
levels. Due to its paramount importance, scholars have tried to
elevate the effectiveness of humanitarian activities used to
enhance this complicated relationship. Opinions are divided as
to whether people from upper classes should donate specific
percentage of their money relative to their whole wealth to
charities in order to improve their societies or this idea is a waste
of money. Despite the fact that the effects of saving money
cannot be neglected, it is my firm conviction that rich people
should give their money to charities with respect to their overall
budget. In what follows, I will elaborate on my perspective.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that by giving special
percentage of their money to charities, rich people help other
people from lower social levels. In other words, the money
which is allocated to charities and then to poor people has
myriad of benefits for all the society, of which two of the most important are reducing the rate of poverty, and providing an
economic balance. To begin with, the more poverty becomes
rife in society, the higher the crime rate will be and vice versa.
Poverty is the root of all of bad and negative habits which
threaten even rich ones and their families. Moreover, by sharing
money in different social classes, there will be a financial and
economic balance among members. The more this money is
donated, the more people are able to benefit from public
equipment and infrastructure. According to the study conducted
in university of Tehran, seven in every ten people in prisons
come from poor neighborhoods, and this clearly demonstrates
the effect of poverty on crime rate. Had rich people donated
more money to them, they would have led a better and positive
life.
Another worthwhile reason to be mentioned is that giving
money to charities is advantageous for rich people as well. The
more they donate their money, the more they benefit from this
donation. Not only do they gain fame from humanitarian
activities, but also their money cultivates talents of educated
young generation from lower levels of society. Firstly, media
and social networks start to introduce these people as
magnificent role models of nation. Ethical people start to pay more attention to these people and as a result new and
astonishing opportunities will be provided for them. On the
other hand, poor people to whom they donated most of their
money, become fruitful and sophisticated members of society
who run the wheels of their factories. Take my personal
experience as a compelling example; I had a colleague and he
donated most of his money to build schools in poor regions of
my country. After a while, reporters from newspapers and media
interviewed him and one month later, another rich person sent
him a letter and asked him for cooperation in making a new
factory to make pumps for combined cycle power plants.
To wrap up, it is a foregone conclusion that rich people should
donate their money to charities based on the amount of money
they have. The fact that it is beneficial for people from lower
social classes, coupled with the fact that giving this money is
advantageous for rich people, is the reason which strengthens
my claim
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ated relationship. Opinions are divided as to whether people from upper classes should donate...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, then, well, while, as a result, in other words, to begin with, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 52.1666666667 169% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2986.0 1977.66487455 151% => OK
No of words: 577.0 407.700716846 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17504332756 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90110439584 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7269723737 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481802426343 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 917.1 618.680645161 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3726133491 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.416666667 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0416666667 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 54.0 4.53405017921 1191% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275901598331 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0936379054736 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0817485095588 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0601838912486 0.150856017488 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0688055735333 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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