Celebrities play a pivotal role in society. Some people believe that famous entertainent and athletes are more significant and important to younger people than older one. However, others disagree. In my opinion celebrities play crucial role in younger people life. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in following essay.
First, younger individuals intersted to have roll model in their life. When you are young, you are going to have exiting life you like to listen to music, playing, swiming and...in this situation celebrites play as your roll model in your life. you want to mimic and follow their life and how they are living in order to mimic in your privet life. One of my own experience is a good case in point. When I was 16 years old I was interested to study sport in university. I always play sky when ever Ihad time. I have allways wanted to be arnold. I allways follow his life on the internet. although he was very famouse and older than me but I have have enjoyed to mimic his sky playin. This circumstanc give me a chance to prove my playing in sky and every year I behavioured like him until I become real arnold. This example clearly illustrates that yoiungester enjoy to have role mode in their life and celebritiees play an important role in their life.
Second, celebrities are very active in social media which are access to every young people.
if you are in young age then you have more access to social media because in new society most of the young people have interested to have social media on the internet. this media are one of the important connection that make relationship. Thus every younge individual has access to this social media Thus they are always engage whit famous people. For example, most of the young people who live in modern society have access to internet whit their mobile phone. Although they are enjoying to follow celebrities in different media but, they have access them easier in social media. This example clearly illustrates that why young people are most following celebrities in social media.
In conclusion. I strongly agree that young celebrities are more important to young people than older one. For two reasones. First they want to have role modell. Second, social media are more accesible to young people than old one so it is easy for them to follow celebrities in social media.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, then, thus, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1957.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46135533819 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432038834951 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.3471246369 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.4814814815 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2592592593 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.62962962963 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192919371845 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556734777516 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631613426897 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122102309024 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642072788897 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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