Speaking about todays’ scenario, the extreme dedication towards work has lessen the time for sleep and consume a healthy diet. The consumption of junk and ready to use food has increased which is leading to obesity. I have a couple suggestions for him, in order to remove extra kilos of weight.
Firstly, the best of the way to get rid of fat is- running. In the form of sweat, it burns down an extra amount of calories, carbohydrates, which are responsible for the accumulation of fat. An exercise, afterwards, acts as a panacea for the removal of weight. The morning workout enables the proper metabolism in the body. Exercising or even performing yoga helps in lowering the risk of various diseases like heart attack, problem in breathing and many more. Furthermore, working out in gym afterwards, aids in removal of unwanted fat on various body parts.
Secondly, I will insist him to make a proper and scheduled diet plan. Starting of day, by consuming more lukewarm water. It assists in urinating out the dirt from inside of our body. The consumption of fruits and taking diet rich in proteins, minerals and vitamins, will not affect the immune system. Controlling diet, eating more salad, fibre enriched meals and avoiding the junk and too much oily food, results in declining the fat. I would like to stipulate with an illustration, my brother weighing more than the average, managed to lose around 30kgs in 90 nearly six months. With the proper and daily running in early morning, thereafter exercising for some time and managing the diet, he was able to achieve in time.
In conclusion, I would like to suggest the diet and exercising as two main factors for loosing weight.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'lessened'.
Suggestion: lessened
...the extreme dedication towards work has lessen the time for sleep and consume a health...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, in fact, speaking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 43.0788530466 26% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1412.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 288.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90277777778 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69765523186 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.628472222222 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.4331625748 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0588235294 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9411764706 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0410338133661 0.236089414692 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0129511132692 0.076458572812 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0242912397905 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0335807688172 0.150856017488 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0248646721878 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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