23-Integrated Writing
In the reading passage, the author claims that three hypothesis may account for the overall decline of the yellow cedar. However, the following listening material entirely challenged the statement made by the writer. The speaker contends that none of them are adequate.
To begin with, the passage insists that the insect parasites from cedar bark beetle leads to the decline of yellow cedar. Because this kind of beetle killed cedars with its larvae eat the wood. The speaker, however argues that the beetle cannot be the fundamental cause. Because the beetle can only attack damaged or sick cedars, which are probably died anyway. Instead, those healthy cedars are more resistant to insect infestation. Their bark and leaves contained certain chemical substance that are poisonous to insects, make them impossible to be attacked by the beetle.
Furthermore, the author of the reading claims bears may contribute to the decline too, since bears have a keen on sugar which is abundant in the bark of yellow cedars. As a result, the bears will claw at cedars and weaken them and eventually cause the decline. In contrast, the professor suggests that bears are not responsible for the overall population decline, for decline occurred both in mainland and island. The point is that there are no bears in the island but cedars there still declined.
Finally, the writer displays that the climate changes may be to blame. Because those climate changes could influence the cedars’ root system, making the roots grow in winter and suffer a frost damage. This may undermined the health of the cedars and eventually killed them. Nevertheless, the lecture indicates that this is not the main reason for the decline. According to the listening material, there are more cedars died in lower elevation where is warmer, than in higher elevation where is colder. If the passage is right, there should be more cedars died in higher elevation which is not the fact. So, as the lecturer said, climate changes may make them more sensitive but cannot kill them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e leads to the decline of yellow cedar. Because this kind of beetle killed cedars with ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, in contrast, kind of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1373.03311258 125% => OK
No of words: 338.0 270.72406181 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08284023669 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41864221993 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 145.348785872 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520710059172 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 419.366225166 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 1.25165562914 639% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.1891006603 49.2860985944 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9 110.228320801 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 7.06452816374 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 4.45695364238 292% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.3589403974 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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