Although the sale of rhinoceros horns is illegal worldwide, rhinoceroses (Rhinos) are commonly poached (hunted illegally) for their horns, which can be sold for tens of thousands of dollars per kilogram. Rhino horns are so valuable that one type of rhino is already extinct because poachers killed too many of them. All rhinos may soon become extinct unless something is done to help save them. Several ideas have been suggested
The first idea is for wildlife experts to “dehorn" Rhinos living in the wild. Dehorning means removing the horns of living rhinos to make them less attractive to poachers Horns can be removed without hurting the animals if medical equipment and drugs to calm the animals are used When this strategy was tried on a small scale in the early 1990s; none of the rhinos dehorned at the time were killed by poachers.
The second possibility is to educate consumers. The majority of rhino horn sold is used in medicines Although rhino horn is believed to have health benefits, this belief has no scientific foundation Rhino horn consists almost entirely of keratin, the same material found in human hair and nails. Keratin has no known health value. Educating consumers about keratin could greatly decrease the demand for rhino horn
The third possibility is to legalize government sales of rhino horn. Some governments have large amounts of horn, taken from poachers they have arrested This horn is often kept in storage. However, if government sales were legal, large quantities of horn that governments already have could be sold at very low prices Poachers kill rhinos because consumers pay high prices for their horns If governments started selling cheap rhino horn, rhino poaching would no longer be profitable and would probably stop, at least for a while. That might help endangered rhino populations to recover.
Killing rhinoceros by poachers for their horn is a big challenge that threatens their existence. In the passage, the author concentrates on several solutions to save them from extinction. However, the lecturer cast doubt on these solutions and mentioned that they have significant weaknesses, also respectively points out the problems with all author's assertions.
To begin with, according to the passage removing the horn of Rhinos that living in nature would be a good solution. It refers to successful work in 1992 in this regard. On the contrary, the lecturer raises the fact that this plan is not practical because they have to find all of them and prepare special conditions for surgery in order to remove their horn. In addition, they use their horn for many aims such as protecting their territories, finding food, saving their children, and so on.
Moreover, the passage brings up another idea by proposing a teaching program for consumers to prevent using the horn. In the program, they can teach them that using Rhino's horn does not have any scientific foundation. Conversely, the lecturer highlights the fact that many people have deep cultural concepts that we can not change their minds in the meantime. In fact, they have storage beliefs to use Rhino horn for medical usage.
The last point discussed in the passage has to do with the legalization of the horn trade by government. It mentioned that government has many horns in storage and can sell them in order to decrease the horn demand to reduce Rhinos poaching. However, with reference to the account of the lecturer, this plan could be applicable. Many people do not like to buy horn because is illegal If the government sell those horns, many people want to buy horn for decorative things and the demand for horn will increase. Therefore, killing of Rhinos will increase, and indeed its population can not recover.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, as to, in addition, in fact, such as, on the contrary, to begin with, with reference to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 22.412803532 147% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 30.3222958057 152% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1581.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 316.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00316455696 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63653558684 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 145.348785872 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528481012658 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 419.366225166 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 2.5761589404 311% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4125935567 49.2860985944 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8125 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.9375 7.06452816374 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326200102653 0.272083759551 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11137435682 0.0996497079465 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0788863256999 0.0662205650399 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199513853739 0.162205337803 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646033498888 0.0443174109184 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.3589403974 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 63.6247240618 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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