Both the reading and the lecture talk about T. Rex fossils, and possibles traces of tissues that may belong to these animals. Whereas, the reading explains three reasons to support this point, the listening disagrees. It claims that these reasons are not convincing.
First, the reading says that small branching channels that were found inside bones might be remands of blood vessels. But, the listening disagrees. It claims that soft substances are not specifically traces of vessels, due to the fact that bacteria might colonized bones and eats the mineral present on it. In other words, bacteria might left characteristics that appear such as blood vessels, thus, confusing scientists.
Second, the reading states that scientists discovered spheres containing Iron. Because of this, we would assume that they had blood vessels in the past. Nevertheless, the listener doesn't support this point. He states that, also Iron has been found in others primitive animals that didn't have red blood cells. So this reason, could be rule out.
Finally, the reading expresses that scientists found collagen on T. Rex fossils. Contrary, the listener disregard this point. He says that according to science, collagen cannot last longer than 1000 years. Furthermore, this reason contradict science theory because T. Rex fossils are millions of years old. He thinks that perhaps, this collagen came from investigator, while caring the fossils to the lab.
and possibles traces of tissues
and possible traces of tissues
could be rule out.
could be ruled out.
Sentence: It claims that soft substances are not specifically traces of vessels, due to the fact that bacteria might colonized bones and eats the mineral present on it.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to might and colonized
Sentence: In other words, bacteria might left characteristics that appear such as blood vessels, thus, confusing scientists.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to might and left
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.471 21.0 //why you put sentences like: So this reason, could be rule out?
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Score: 20 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 12
No. of Words: 229 250
No. of Characters: 1175 1200
No. of Different Words: 132 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.89 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.131 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.469 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 68 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 36 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.471 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.912 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.306 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.508 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4