Apparently, there has been a debate about the benefits of buying the franchise , how franchises may help people to start their own business safely. The author adopts an opinion support buying the franchise, while the professor tried to convince their stu

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Apparently, there has been a debate about the benefits of buying the franchise , how franchises may help people to start their own business safely. The author adopts an opinion support buying the franchise, while the professor tried to convince their students to opposite side of view.

First of all, the issue about the providing with equipment and supplies, the professor contends that franchise forces their user to buy a very specific items in over price, even though, the presence of these items in the market in lower price.So what the reading state about the benefits of getting appropriate supplies, practically not true.
Second, the professor maintains an opposite side of view about the advantage from the advertising has been made by franchise, the professor said the owners of a franchise have to pay up to 6% from their income, so the return must be more specific to their businesses, but the franchises make advertising to their brands, which had been sold by other business owners, then he adds, the business owner can get much more benefits with lower cost,if he pay for his own advertising . By this point, the listening approves the benefits from franchise' advertising is just a myth.
Finally, the security of the new businesses, the professor thinks,it is true that franchise may help in secure the businesses, but that doesn't the only choice, there is another choice that doesn't mention by the author, this third option is buying already existing business from their owner, by doing that the percent of successful will increase to twice in the first four years.So the listening finds another solution to the risk factor of starting a new business.
In sum, the professor explains why he doesn't trust the franchise benefits, also he gives explanations for each point raised by the author in the reading passage.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...priate supplies, practically not true. Second, the professor maintains an oppos...
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... franchise advertising is just a myth. Finally, the security of the new busines...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, then, third, first of all, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1294.0 1373.03311258 94% => OK
No of words: 258.0 270.72406181 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01550387597 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60274047623 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573643410853 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 388.8 419.366225166 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 13.0662251656 38% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 51.0 21.2450331126 240% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 156.349096576 49.2860985944 317% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 258.8 110.228320801 235% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 51.6 21.698381199 238% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.0 7.06452816374 241% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 4.19205298013 310% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29239446386 0.272083759551 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13843281256 0.0996497079465 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533251847552 0.0662205650399 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15180638278 0.162205337803 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532027953388 0.0443174109184 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.0 13.3589403974 210% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 53.8541721854 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.0 11.0289183223 199% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.42419426049 112% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 63.6247240618 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 10.7273730684 247% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.4 10.498013245 213% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 22.0 11.2008830022 196% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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