Because of climate change more and more land that was once used to grow crops or provide food for animals is turning to dry unusable desert land There are many proposals about how to stop this process known as desertification A number of proposals involve

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Because of climate change, more and more land that was once used to grow crops or provide food for animals is turning to dry, unusable desert land. There are many proposals about how to stop this process, known as desertification. A number of proposals involve growing trees, because trees can help protect soil and provide many other benefits to fight against desertification. Some scientists have proposed that the best way to grow trees in dry areas in danger of desertification is by using a box-shaped device surrounding the young tree. The device collects water that condenses from vapor in the atmosphere and helps the tree to grow. However, other scientists believe that this device will not be successful in fighting against desertification for the following reasons.

First, at a cost of 25 U S. dollars each, the device would make growing trees a prohibitively expensive process. Meaningful efforts to fight desertification involve growing millions of trees. Some countries most affected by desertification cannot afford to buy devices for millions of trees

Second, plans for fighting desertification involve asking local people to install and maintain the devices. People living in some of the areas most affected by desertification work long days in harsh conditions: sometimes barely managing to provide food for their families. It would be difficult to motivate these people to look after trees that cannot serve as a source of food for them.

Third, the device's ability to collect and conserve water is limited. Each one provides only enough water to keep a small tree alive. Trees that have outgrown the device have to deal with unforgiving environmental conditions on their own. In some places where the devices are being tried, six months can pass without a drop of rain. Once the trees become too big for the device, they may not be able to survive in such a harsh environment.

Both reading and the lecture revolve around the repercussions of using a box-shaped device to collect water and avoid desetification in arid habitats. The writer provides evidence that the proposed device is not profitable enough and have strong downsides while the lecturer find his ideas dubious and cast doubt on the reasons mentioned in the paragraphs.
Firts, the author states that the box-shaped devices are too expensive for growing millions of trees to avoid desetification. In contrast, the orater holds the view that these gadgets are reusable for more than twenty times. She adds that whenever a tree grows and the box becom small for it, the users can remove th tree from the box and replant another tree in it. So when we devide the cost of device into number of growable tree, it is economically reasonable.
Second, the article assets that local people in desert areas are work realy hard in harsh environments and they can not even provide enough food for their family. Therefore the chance of convincing them to use these boxes is low. On the contrary, the speaker claims that these devices can also provide water for other products like as vegetables and by doing so, the farmer not only can avoid the desetification but also can provide more food for his family and this is a temting motivation for them.
Furthermore, the writer mentions that the device's reserviour is quit limited and it can only help small trees to stay alive. He also points out that whenever the trees become mature and the users remove it from the device, the trees can not resist the arid enviroment and die. Conversely, the speaker throws out a challenge to this argument by asserting that during the time that the tree is depenent on the device, its root can grow and reach down to the moist soil. So eventually, they can also survive without the device and the mentioned reason, like all aforementioned ones, is unconvincing.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 164, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...n provide enough food for their family. Therefore the chance of convincing them to use th...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, while, in contrast, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 7.30242825607 205% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 329.0 270.72406181 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85410334347 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57833902975 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 145.348785872 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553191489362 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 419.366225166 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7351867208 49.2860985944 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.846153846 110.228320801 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3076923077 21.698381199 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 7.06452816374 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111071931872 0.272083759551 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0400513505843 0.0996497079465 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0341145724349 0.0662205650399 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0694256665593 0.162205337803 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424019765839 0.0443174109184 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 63.6247240618 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 20 minutes.

Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 164, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...n provide enough food for their family. Therefore the chance of convincing them to use th...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, while, in contrast, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 7.30242825607 205% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 329.0 270.72406181 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85410334347 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57833902975 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 145.348785872 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553191489362 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 419.366225166 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7351867208 49.2860985944 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.846153846 110.228320801 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3076923077 21.698381199 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 7.06452816374 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111071931872 0.272083759551 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0400513505843 0.0996497079465 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0341145724349 0.0662205650399 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0694256665593 0.162205337803 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424019765839 0.0443174109184 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 63.6247240618 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 20 minutes.

Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.