Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who focus on one skill only | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who focus on one skill only.

In the modern era, while technology is highly advanced and access to learning materials is easier than ever, there is a serious debate on putting the focus on only one skill or learning various skills in the learning process. In my perspective, I believe that putting all heart and soul into one and only subject is more advantageous and I will support my reasons in the following paragraphs.

To begin with, the educational system is advanced enough around the world to provide everyone with adequate and basic knowledge about different topics that can help them to have enough efficiency in various fields of their daily life. For instance, everyone is obligated to finish high school in modern countries, and basic mathematics, biology, and art are tough in that period, providing everyone with fundamental levels of science in different fields. So they can easily do calculations for their daily activities or draw a simple stick figure for their children. In the competitive job market, the more you are professional, the more you are desirable. Therefore people have to go deeper in just one field by going to college and choosing a major. As time passes, they will learn deeper and become well-rounded individuals in that area, while if they had not chosen a specific major in college their knowledge would be shallow that could not help them to be professionals in one specific major.

Second, when people focus on only one subject, they will learn it comprehensively without missing any hidden points. Comparing past doctors to modern ones, they used to read many books in various fields including astrology, biology, and medicine in order to cure patients, while, in the contemporary era, medical students are obligated to study medicine focusing on human diseases, anatomy and the detrimental factors that can affect them. As it is obvious, the treatment process is not only faster these days but it's is more efficient which leads to a significant decrease in the mortality rate in the communities.

In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it's better for individuals, to focus on only one skill. This is because it not only helps society to nourish professional workforce but also them to learn the knowledge more comprehensively and deeper which lead s to more intact and flawless actions.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 658, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ofessional, the more you are desirable. Therefore people have to go deeper in just one fi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1929.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0497382199 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80560010648 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552356020942 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.577677846 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.384615385 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3846153846 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223835151092 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801434493472 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504396289999 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136424371866 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284883101493 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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