ciggarate and junk food.
I the reading the indicates some methods in order to decrease consumption of ciggarate and junk food.
In the first argument, the reading materials point out that the government should be expose more taxes on cigarette and unhealthy food. This governmental strategy will lead to reducing of cigarette and malnutrition foods since of high cost of it. On the other hand the speaker is disagree with this strategy because of the following reason. First of all, the high cost of cigarette which cause to buying low-quality products that it would be high-risking to health. Moreover, high cost is a concept that it would be high quality. Were the unhealthy to high-cost, the people would purchase buy more and more junk food and malnutrition foods.
Secondly, there are some argument in case of fairing the tax in order to buying cigarette and unhealthy food. I the text posed that the it is unfair that the medical governmental budget waste on someone that do not care about his health with smoking and unhealthy food. Conversely in the lecture discussed that these strategy is not applicable because some reasons. Firstly, there are not homogeneous state of income in the society. These plan will expose more pressure on low-income compared to high-salary.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 86, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'exposed'?
Suggestion: exposed
...point out that the government should be expose more taxes on cigarette and unhealthy f...
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Line 2, column 281, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'disagreed'.
Suggestion: disagreed
...of it. On the other hand the speaker is disagree with this strategy because of the follo...
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Line 3, column 133, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'it'?
Suggestion: the; it
...d unhealthy food. I the text posed that the it is unfair that the medical governmental...
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Line 3, column 271, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Conversely,
...health with smoking and unhealthy food. Conversely in the lecture discussed that these str...
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Line 3, column 312, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this strategy' or 'these strategies'?
Suggestion: this strategy; these strategies
...onversely in the lecture discussed that these strategy is not applicable because some reasons....
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Line 3, column 510, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... on low-income compared to high-salary.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, firstly, moreover, second, secondly, so, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1052.0 1373.03311258 77% => OK
No of words: 208.0 270.72406181 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05769230769 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72093298913 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 145.348785872 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528846153846 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 326.7 419.366225166 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.8555808394 49.2860985944 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.6666666667 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 21.698381199 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58333333333 7.06452816374 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212478715568 0.272083759551 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798488330538 0.0996497079465 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117918087253 0.0662205650399 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206244744411 0.162205337803 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153311870332 0.0443174109184 346% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.3589403974 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 63.6247240618 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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