Did bees (a type of insect) exist on Earth as early as 200 million years ago? Such a theory is supported by the discovery of very old fossil structures that resemble bee nests. The structures have been found inside 200- million-year-old fossilized trees in the state of Arizona in the southwestern United States. However, many skeptics doubt that the structures were created by bees. The skeptics support their view with several arguments.
The lecture and the reading passage are concerned with whether or not the old fossil structures were created by bees. Firstly, the passage points out that there is no fossil of bees which can prove the existence of bees. however, the lecturer argues that this is related to lack of specific tree species which produce sticky material. that is the prerequisite of the fossil remains. Secondly, noting that flowering plants were absent in the period of the fossil structures, the lecturer explained that bees in previous times could not necessarily feed on flower. Instead, they could survive with the help of non-flowering plants, for example, pine. they adapt to new environment and rely on flowering plant later on. Lastly, the fossil structures manifest as not similar to nests of modern bees in detail, however, as explained in the lecture, a test proves that the fossil has the same chemical material as modern nests do. modern nests have water-proof chemicals, which are also found in the fossil structures.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... the reading passage are concerned with whether or not the old fossil structures were created ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
... which can prove the existence of bees. however, the lecturer argues that this is relat...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
... species which produce sticky material. that is the prerequisite of the fossil remai...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...on-flowering plants, for example, pine. they adapt to new environment and rely on fl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 22.412803532 40% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 846.0 1373.03311258 62% => OK
No of words: 167.0 270.72406181 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06586826347 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 4.04702891845 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56913444394 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 145.348785872 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59880239521 0.540411800872 111% => OK
syllable_count: 256.5 419.366225166 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.5823724573 49.2860985944 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5555555556 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 7.06452816374 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.09492273731 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182804746835 0.272083759551 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0756274740313 0.0996497079465 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528324139904 0.0662205650399 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182804746835 0.162205337803 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 63.6247240618 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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