The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.
"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a five-hundred-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read costs only $500 per employee - a small price to pay when you consider the benefits to Acme. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, Acme would benefit greatly by requiring all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
In the passage, the writer gives a recommendation to require all the employees of acme Publishing company to participate in the easy read course, because of a good test results from other companies and arresting benefits in contrast to the cost. however, whether or not the recommendation is reasonable and advisable requires further information and some key questions calls for attention.
To begin with, witnessing some cases indicated in the passage suggests some graduate of the course acquire greatly improved productivity, however, there are some questions about the validation of the evidence. For instance, what is the ratio of the course participants who turn out to have such a improved reading ability. if the two cases mentioned in the passages are the only evidence, then we would be dubious about the true effectiveness of the course. otherwise, with a high ratio can the course prove its positive influence.
In addition, while easy read can give some benefits to acme company, including seminars and lifelong subscription, it is still dubious about the value of this seeming benefit before we can answer the question whether this benefit can be assured. it is not rare that some benefits promised by some companies turn out to lost its validity because of their breakdown. So whether or not the company would run well in the future to come should be given more attention. otherwise, the promise of lifelong service means nothing.
Even if the answer to the questions above can support the recommendation, we still cannot determine whether or not it is reasonable to require all of the employees to take the course. that is because the reading capability of different employee vary. For those qualified readers, it is a waste of time and money to take the course.
To sum up, the recommendation should be still under discussion despite of some positive evidence.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 309 350
No. of Characters: 1535 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.193 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.968 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.78 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 38.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.951 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.458 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.81 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.208 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 170, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'result'?
Suggestion: result
...asy read course, because of a good test results from other companies and arresting bene...
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Line 1, column 247, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...sting benefits in contrast to the cost. however, whether or not the recommendation is r...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 256, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...efits in contrast to the cost. however, whether or not the recommendation is reasonable and ad...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 296, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... participants who turn out to have such a improved reading ability. if the two ca...
^
Line 5, column 324, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...o have such a improved reading ability. if the two cases mentioned in the passages...
^^
Line 5, column 459, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Otherwise
...t the true effectiveness of the course. otherwise, with a high ratio can the course prove...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 197, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...is seeming benefit before we can answer the question whether this benefit can be assured. it is not ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 247, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...on whether this benefit can be assured. it is not rare that some benefits promised...
^^
Line 9, column 369, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...validity because of their breakdown. So whether or not the company would run well in the futur...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 465, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Otherwise
...to come should be given more attention. otherwise, the promise of lifelong service means ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 101, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...commendation, we still cannot determine whether or not it is reasonable to require all of the ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 144, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ther or not it is reasonable to require all of the employees to take the course. that is b...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 185, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
...ll of the employees to take the course. that is because the reading capability of di...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, still, then, well, while, for instance, in addition, in contrast, in contrast to, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 309.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15210355987 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88322090524 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511326860841 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7169311602 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.714285714 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0714285714 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78571428571 5.70786347227 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191947718961 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631711708142 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065722618825 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101231658742 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544538058963 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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