Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
The nineteenth century brought with it a burst of new discoveries and inventions that revolutionized the lifestyle of people. Nowadays, people are spending too much time on their personal enjoyment by doing whatever they like to do instead of doing things which they should do. I will elaborate the reasons why in the ensuing paragraphs.
First of all, let's talk about our young generation. They are so involved in new technology that they cannot find time to do other activities like sports, school or college assignments, or spend time with friends and families, to name a few. For example, my nephew, who is 21 years old and he is the college. He loves to play video games and whenever a new game comes on the market he likes to buy it. He used to practice basketball with his friends almost every day for the weekend game and he used to visit us after the game on weekends at our house to have fun with his cousins. Now, after involving in video games he stopped playing basketball and I barely see him at my house. When I asked my sister about it, she said that whenever he finds free time he starts playing online games with his friends online. That’s why I believe that these days people are doing whatever they like to do instead of doing things which they are supposed to do or they used to do.
Furthermore, housewives these days are involved in a lot of different activities other than house. Before, after finishing their house work, women had an interest in playing with their children, helping them with their homework or doing a variety of crafts work, but nowadays they like to spend their free time talking to their friends on the phone, spend a lot of their time on the internet,watching movies on television or going out shopping. Of course, they can do these activities also for their fun, but should not ignore their children.
Finally, men are also involved in their personal enjoyment that they cannot find time to spend with their family. Before, after work, they used to spend time with their wives and children, but now when they come home after work, they like to check to watch good movies, watch videos on social media and talk to their friends on the phone. They are ignoring their families and as result their family life is disturbed.
In conclusion, people feel no responsibility towards themselves for others and they like to spend more time for personal enjoyment then doing things they should do. As a result, their family life is disturbed, nd young generation is going towards the wrong direction.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, so, then, for example, in conclusion, of course, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 7.30242825607 246% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 22.412803532 308% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 30.3222958057 228% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2118.0 1373.03311258 154% => OK
No of words: 446.0 270.72406181 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74887892377 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.04702891845 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48167690561 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 145.348785872 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466367713004 0.540411800872 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 634.5 419.366225166 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 3.25607064018 369% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.25165562914 399% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.6743874348 49.2860985944 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.473684211 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4736842105 21.698381199 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21052631579 7.06452816374 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 4.33554083885 254% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415762406912 0.272083759551 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143769222764 0.0996497079465 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.207212050528 0.0662205650399 313% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298108242468 0.162205337803 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14687559457 0.0443174109184 331% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.3589403974 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 53.8541721854 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.2367328918 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.42419426049 88% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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