Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is of great worth to discuss whether people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment rather than doing things they should do. The answer of the question can vary depending on each individual's perspective. As fas as I'm concerned, I agree with the statement because they can get rid of their negative feeling by doing thing they like to do.
First of all, doing things they like to do can relieve stress.
This is mainly because, people can get over their stressful situations while consuming their time on enjoyable things. People in these days get stressed out a lof from a huge workload and its pressure. The pressure is often originated from doing things they should do. However, they need to get rid of their stress by doing enjoyable things. Through this quality time, they will eventually be able to get back their works.
The perfect example of this is a friend of mine. He used to suffer from a heavy workload. He sometimes stayed up all night getting his work done, so he was basically exhausted mentally and physically. Then, one day, he got to have a chance to join an inline hockey club, and it truly allowed him to escape from all the stressful matters like the pressure he should do his work. Thanks to this, he now has a relaxed and confident mental state.
Second, they can feel a good atmosphere by doing something which makes people enjoyable.
This is mainly because, most of people can be influenced by their environments' atmosphere. The influence of the atmosphere is a lot more important than they think. Thus, they should feel a good atmosphere. Doing things they like to do simply makes them so cheerful and energetic that they can go to their work with confidence.
The perfect example of this is my cousin. When he was prepared for university entrance exam, he was struggling with mathematics. Then, one day, he had to go through such a difficult situation, so he got stressed out a lot. He thought he needed to have rest, and he played internet game with his friend. It made him so cheerful and energetic, but he spent his time too much. However, he didn't regret for this because he solved the situation that bothered him.
To summarize what I've mentioned above, I'm for the notion because although people consume too much time to do things like to do, they can remove their stress, and feel a positive feelings. Moreover, people can show more outstanding performance after they enjoy their favorite things.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 191, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...the question can vary depending on each individuals perspective. As fas as Im concerned, I ...
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Line 1, column 226, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...each individuals perspective. As fas as Im concerned, I agree with the statement b...
^^
Line 6, column 25, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...ple enjoyable. This is mainly because, most of people can be influenced by their environments...
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Line 6, column 327, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y can go to their work with confidence. The perfect example of this is my cousin...
^^^
Line 7, column 387, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...he spent his time too much. However, he didnt regret for this because he solved the s...
^^^^^
Line 8, column 19, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
... that bothered him. To summarize what Ive mentioned above, Im for the notion beca...
^^^
Line 8, column 40, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
... To summarize what Ive mentioned above, Im for the notion because although people ...
^^
Line 8, column 179, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'feeling'?
Suggestion: feeling
...emove their stress, and feel a positive feelings. Moreover, people can show more outstan...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, thus, while, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 5.04856512141 297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 12.0772626932 33% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 64.0 22.412803532 286% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 30.3222958057 185% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2022.0 1373.03311258 147% => OK
No of words: 428.0 270.72406181 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72429906542 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.04702891845 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50573627866 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 145.348785872 151% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514018691589 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 419.366225166 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 3.25607064018 553% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 13.0662251656 207% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2126776791 49.2860985944 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.8888888889 110.228320801 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8518518519 21.698381199 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 7.06452816374 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.09492273731 195% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 4.33554083885 392% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407037024282 0.272083759551 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133384120752 0.0996497079465 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.163796638217 0.0662205650399 247% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262577014419 0.162205337803 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.168374781108 0.0443174109184 380% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 13.3589403974 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 53.8541721854 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.0289183223 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 12.2367328918 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.42419426049 87% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 191, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...the question can vary depending on each individuals perspective. As fas as Im concerned, I ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 226, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...each individuals perspective. As fas as Im concerned, I agree with the statement b...
^^
Line 6, column 25, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...ple enjoyable. This is mainly because, most of people can be influenced by their environments...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 327, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y can go to their work with confidence. The perfect example of this is my cousin...
^^^
Line 7, column 387, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...he spent his time too much. However, he didnt regret for this because he solved the s...
^^^^^
Line 8, column 19, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
... that bothered him. To summarize what Ive mentioned above, Im for the notion beca...
^^^
Line 8, column 40, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
... To summarize what Ive mentioned above, Im for the notion because although people ...
^^
Line 8, column 179, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'feeling'?
Suggestion: feeling
...emove their stress, and feel a positive feelings. Moreover, people can show more outstan...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, thus, while, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 5.04856512141 297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 12.0772626932 33% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 64.0 22.412803532 286% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 30.3222958057 185% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2022.0 1373.03311258 147% => OK
No of words: 428.0 270.72406181 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72429906542 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.04702891845 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50573627866 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 145.348785872 151% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514018691589 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 419.366225166 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 3.25607064018 553% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 13.0662251656 207% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2126776791 49.2860985944 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.8888888889 110.228320801 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8518518519 21.698381199 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 7.06452816374 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.09492273731 195% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 4.33554083885 392% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407037024282 0.272083759551 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133384120752 0.0996497079465 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.163796638217 0.0662205650399 247% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262577014419 0.162205337803 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.168374781108 0.0443174109184 380% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 13.3589403974 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 53.8541721854 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.0289183223 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 12.2367328918 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.42419426049 87% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.