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Both the reading and the lecture try to discuss paper form and electronic form of medical information about a patients in the United States. In the reading section, the writer contends that storing medical information in electronic form can be highly beneficial and provides three reasons for support; in contrast, the professor casts doubts on reading points by indicating that the advantages of the electronic form are uncertain.
First of all, in the reading, the writer claims that electronic records are cost effective compared to the paper records, because, in this way, they can decline costs by eliminating required storage space which is used to maintain paper forms, and also doctors can readily access to electronic forms from everywhere they want; However, the professor rejects this notion by stating that doctors need storage space even after adopting to electronic forms because they need to keep paper forms as a backup and maybe they will refer to them in the future.
Moreover, the reading passage holds the view that electronic records can prevent potential errors because they have standard forms; on the contrary, the lecturer underlines the fact that electronic records cannot eliminate errors because in this process, also doctors use pen, paper, and take notes by hand. and staffs should later enter this information in computer and save them as electronic forms, so it is likely that they make mistakes and cannot interpret doctors' notes correctly.
In addition, the writer mentions that electronic records can be used in research projects; conversely, the professor states that there are some restricted privacy laws in the United States for using medical information;, as a result researchers have to follow these restricted laws. Moreover, According to theses laws, their permit to use medical information for any purpose maybe will be blocked.
Comments
Essay evaluation report by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a patient' or simply 'patients'?
Suggestion: a patient; patients
...ronic form of medical information about a patients in the United States. In the reading se...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 308, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...use pen, paper, and take notes by hand. and staffs should later enter this informat...
^^^
Line 4, column 292, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... follow these restricted laws. Moreover, According to theses laws, their permit t...
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'conversely', 'first', 'however', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.26586102719 0.261695866417 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.157099697885 0.158904122519 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0755287009063 0.0723426182421 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0483383685801 0.0435111971325 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0302114803625 0.0277247811725 109% => OK
Prepositions: 0.126888217523 0.128828473217 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0453172205438 0.0370669169778 122% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.59105293388 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0302114803625 0.0208969081088 145% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0996978851964 0.128158765124 78% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0302114803625 0.0158828679856 190% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00604229607251 0.0114777025283 53% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1878.0 1645.83664459 114% => OK
No of words: 297.0 271.125827815 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.32323232323 6.08160592843 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.04852973271 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.424242424242 0.374372842146 113% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.326599326599 0.287516216867 114% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.208754208754 0.187439937562 111% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.138047138047 0.113142543107 122% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59105293388 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525252525253 0.539623497131 97% => OK
Word variations: 53.1451453867 53.8517498576 99% => OK
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0529801325 54% => OK
Sentence length: 42.4285714286 21.7502111507 195% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 135.484316436 49.3711431718 274% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 268.285714286 132.220823453 203% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 42.4285714286 21.7502111507 195% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.71428571429 0.878197800319 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.39072847682 88% => OK
Readability: 75.0885040885 50.5018328374 149% => OK
Elegance: 1.85897435897 1.90840788429 97% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.549887131256 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.253567872115 0.142949733639 177% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.122935974967 0.0787303798458 156% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.78279825755 0.631733273073 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.16175968252 0.139662658121 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.266732575781 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.103435571967 0% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.329958240181 0.414875509568 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0918319550905 0.0530846634433 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.40443939384 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0528353158467 0% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.26048565121 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.62251655629 83% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 3.1766004415 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 6.0 10.2958057395 58% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a patient' or simply 'patients'?
Suggestion: a patient; patients
...ronic form of medical information about a patients in the United States. In the reading se...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 308, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...use pen, paper, and take notes by hand. and staffs should later enter this informat...
^^^
Line 4, column 292, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... follow these restricted laws. Moreover, According to theses laws, their permit t...
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'conversely', 'first', 'however', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.26586102719 0.261695866417 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.157099697885 0.158904122519 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0755287009063 0.0723426182421 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0483383685801 0.0435111971325 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0302114803625 0.0277247811725 109% => OK
Prepositions: 0.126888217523 0.128828473217 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0453172205438 0.0370669169778 122% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.59105293388 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0302114803625 0.0208969081088 145% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0996978851964 0.128158765124 78% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0302114803625 0.0158828679856 190% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00604229607251 0.0114777025283 53% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1878.0 1645.83664459 114% => OK
No of words: 297.0 271.125827815 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.32323232323 6.08160592843 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.04852973271 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.424242424242 0.374372842146 113% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.326599326599 0.287516216867 114% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.208754208754 0.187439937562 111% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.138047138047 0.113142543107 122% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59105293388 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525252525253 0.539623497131 97% => OK
Word variations: 53.1451453867 53.8517498576 99% => OK
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0529801325 54% => OK
Sentence length: 42.4285714286 21.7502111507 195% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 135.484316436 49.3711431718 274% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 268.285714286 132.220823453 203% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 42.4285714286 21.7502111507 195% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.71428571429 0.878197800319 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.39072847682 88% => OK
Readability: 75.0885040885 50.5018328374 149% => OK
Elegance: 1.85897435897 1.90840788429 97% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.549887131256 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.253567872115 0.142949733639 177% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.122935974967 0.0787303798458 156% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.78279825755 0.631733273073 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.16175968252 0.139662658121 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.266732575781 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.103435571967 0% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.329958240181 0.414875509568 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0918319550905 0.0530846634433 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.40443939384 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0528353158467 0% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.26048565121 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.62251655629 83% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 3.1766004415 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 6.0 10.2958057395 58% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.