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The reading passage proposes that there are three benefits of storing patients' medical records in electronic databases rather than paper databases. On the other hand, the speaker finds all the ideas dubious and presents some evidence to refute them all.
First, even though the reading passage holds the view that that the electronic records decline the cost of storage, the lecturer contends that most of the doctors who choose electronic-base records for storage also keep their papers as back up for some especial purposes such as legal issues. So, they should pay much more than those doctors who opt for paper-based record keeping.
Second, despite the statement in the reading passage that points out by using electronic medical record the chances of making error in recording medical data will fade away and wane, the speaker claims that most of the doctors who use electronic-base record use the pen and pencil when they want to examine the patients, and after that they deliver their records to staffs to transfer them into the computers and in this stage, the chances of making error by staffs builds up significantly.
Finally, the reading passage argues that electronic-base records pave the way for doctors to gather the patients' data for a long time and use these data for some research easily. The speaker dismisses this idea and bring up the idea that it is not easy for everyone to access to data of patients as far as there are some strict and complicated rules in the United States about privacy and when someone want to access to these data, they should get permission from patients and so, the idea of aiding research is ruled out.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 55, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
...ough the reading passage holds the view that that the electronic records decline the cost...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 105, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
... pave the way for doctors to gather the patients data for a long time and use these data...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 402, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...d States about privacy and when someone want to access to these data, they should ge...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'such as', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.271812080537 0.261695866417 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.134228187919 0.158904122519 84% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0637583892617 0.0723426182421 88% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0503355704698 0.0435111971325 116% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0302013422819 0.0277247811725 109% => OK
Prepositions: 0.144295302013 0.128828473217 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0268456375839 0.0370669169778 72% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.4295691228 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0302013422819 0.0208969081088 145% => OK
Particles: 0.010067114094 0.00154638098197 651% => OK
Determiners: 0.127516778523 0.128158765124 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.010067114094 0.0158828679856 63% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0201342281879 0.0114777025283 175% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1654.0 1645.83664459 100% => OK
No of words: 280.0 271.125827815 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.90714285714 6.08160592843 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.04852973271 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.360714285714 0.374372842146 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.260714285714 0.287516216867 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.128571428571 0.187439937562 69% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0607142857143 0.113142543107 54% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4295691228 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 145.348785872 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525 0.539623497131 97% => OK
Word variations: 52.0418140786 53.8517498576 97% => OK
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0529801325 54% => OK
Sentence length: 40.0 21.7502111507 184% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 136.212019608 49.3711431718 276% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 236.285714286 132.220823453 179% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.0 21.7502111507 184% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.14285714286 0.878197800319 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.39072847682 88% => OK
Readability: 66.0714285714 50.5018328374 131% => OK
Elegance: 2.0625 1.90840788429 108% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.549887131256 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.163321233211 0.142949733639 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.110229210026 0.0787303798458 140% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.728863036162 0.631733273073 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.203068998633 0.139662658121 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.266732575781 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.103435571967 0% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.394125687783 0.414875509568 95% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0711943374102 0.0530846634433 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.40443939384 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0528353158467 0% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.26048565121 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.62251655629 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 3.1766004415 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 5.0 10.2958057395 49% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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