Integrated Example Notefull : Zoos (Good)
The article states that zoos are essential and provides three reasons for support. However, the professor explains that activists don’t believe that zoos benefit animals or society and refutes each of the author's reasons.
First, the reading states that animals are treated well in zoos. The professor refutes this point. He states that animals are not treated well. He explains that in a zoo, two red pandas died from exposure to rat poison. zoo safety managers could have prevented this but were not present. The professor explains that this proves that zoo administrators show a lack of care towards animals.
Second, the article claims that zoos are educational. However, the professor says that zoos are still seen as entertainment. The animals in zoos attract visitors. They aren’t the animals that the public should really learn about. Zoos send the message that animals can be used for our own purposes. He states that though some zoos attempt to inform, we can’t understand them in zoos because they are in artificial and misleading exhibits.
Third, the reading claims that zoos protect endangered species. The professor says that this claim is problematic. He explains that the Tamarin is one successful example but that overall, zoos have a poor success rate. Zoos possess a small number of endangered species so they tend to interbreed, which results in birth defects. Also, he states that zoos offer no advantage to saving animals in their native habitat.
- TPO 4 _ Independent TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than today.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- TPO 4 _ Independent TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than today.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- Integrated Example Notefull : Zoos (Fair) 60
- TPO11Independant Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed damaged by human activity Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live What is your opinion Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 70
- Integrated Example Notefull : Zoos (Good) 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 221, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Zoo
...andas died from exposure to rat poison. zoo safety managers could have prevented th...
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Line 7, column 233, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
... have a poor success rate. Zoos possess a small number of endangered species so they tend to inte...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, still, third, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 22.412803532 152% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 16.0 30.3222958057 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1258.0 1373.03311258 92% => OK
No of words: 240.0 270.72406181 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24166666667 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5418579163 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570833333333 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 372.6 419.366225166 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 21.2450331126 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.5769090724 49.2860985944 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.2105263158 110.228320801 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.6315789474 21.698381199 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.63157894737 7.06452816374 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192464808805 0.272083759551 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663803355438 0.0996497079465 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444522181189 0.0662205650399 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126623210159 0.162205337803 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349793839988 0.0443174109184 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.3589403974 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 53.8541721854 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.22 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.7273730684 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.498013245 65% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.