It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours

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It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.

There are two kinds of works: one requires people to work for long hours in three days of a week, and another, just oppositely, requires people to work five days a week but shorter hours. Some people may like to arrange their works into different days. However, I prefer the former, since it would give me more creativeness and a better balance between work and life.

First of all, concentrate working in a relatively long period could increase one's effectiveness. Because our brains would more likely to immersed into a specific mode called "mind flow" when we really focus on the current work. Under this scenario, one could ignore surrounding interruptions, such as smartphone ringing, other people's talking, and noise from the air-controllings. In addition, this scenario is especially helpful to reduce the amount of mistakes one could perform. People under this condition could hardly notice surrounding or the time slash, they will only feel brains tired after working. An appropriate example is not very far to seek. For instance, many gamers try their best to finish video games as soon as possible, this is called "speed running". Much of the best records of speed running were achieved when the gamer was under their "mind flow" condition. Therefore, a relatively long period of working may contribute for people to entry their mind-flow condition, and achieve high effectiveness.

Moreover, a concentrated working could be followed by a long period of rest. This is critical for citizen nowadays, since almost all of us have the demand for accompanying with their families. A long period of rest indicates a lot: traveling to more far away places, playing with more friends, and take care of children more attentive. What's more, this is also helpful for working, since more demand can be suited, when they come back to work, they can more concentrate in their work. However, one could sporadically distract by venial from their family during working if they have no time to finish them in their holidays, which will reduce their performance.

To sum up, I will definitely stand with the scenario that allows me to concentrate on working in a relatively long period, then enjoy life.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, for instance, in addition, such as, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 5.04856512141 297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 30.3222958057 171% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1873.0 1373.03311258 136% => OK
No of words: 364.0 270.72406181 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1456043956 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79069363378 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 145.348785872 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57967032967 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 419.366225166 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.25165562914 479% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2408380528 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.055555556 110.228320801 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 7.06452816374 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235175936123 0.272083759551 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722689628825 0.0996497079465 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797275591524 0.0662205650399 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155933195179 0.162205337803 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0915438248328 0.0443174109184 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 63.6247240618 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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